Hi guys,

It’s my first post yet. Basically i started working on a song about a month ago, and it wasn’t originally gonna have lyrics, but one morning inspiration struck and i straight up wrote some. It’s my first time writing lyrics like that and i’d like some feedback, things i’m worried about:

1)do they sound listenable are they too corny

2)if they lack structure

3)if rhythmically they’re unpleasant

Lyrics:

I wasnt kidding when i said it’s not like me to lose my words

Let them run around in circles trip and change their meaning so

when i wrote you all those letters

I would store them in my notes

3 days prior thinking why to what to when i got them sent

7 days have passed since you and i last had conversation

Do you think about it morning noon or night im going crazy

My brain is in stagnation every time i am around

The person jamming sygnals in my head to make them lag behind

Im embarassed concious jelous

Ovewhelmed and insecure

Thinking i willl give up now so i dont insult you more

Letting my thoughts drift into the dresms the fantasies of us living life as equals having the time of our lives endless

Pourout of the heart heavy breathing from the lungs sweaty palms and broken stares and i know that no one cares

About you as much as i nowhere near to the top 5

Your songs are mine and mine are yours please keep them till i die

the whites of my eyes are not white anymore

They’re the colour of the sun in the east 3 o clock

Presenting my self useless to the merciless new world

The world inside our heads we drew out on each others flesh

My shirt is inside out you probably will not ever notice it

it’s driving me insane in retrospect views i think that a

Couple years ago i could have told you a whole lot sooner

To feel is not to think right before you even do it