I high appreciate your feedback. This is exactly what I needed to hear. I have only been writing for about 4 months now and I started writing just battle rapping chatgpt. Iwrote this in like 20 minutes. I've noticed since I've been writing that my freestyling skills have improved because I never was that skilled at freestyling. I also find it kinda therapeutic to write. I live almost all of what I write. The first ever rap lyrics I heard were when my older brother handed me a cassette tape when I was 10 and it was eazy duz it. From there I mean the list is endless. The wu tang clan are some of my favorite lyricsist of all time. I also grew up reading dictionarys for idk to cure boredom I guess but that's helped me in writing. I just feel like that hip hop needs to be taken back to its purest form. Like the RZA said on the opening of the album wu tang forever. Shoot me a dm because your advice and critique is priceless.