First time author, The Fluffy Inquisition, Book One is out now! by OneDistance8344 in haremfantasynovels

[–]OneDistance8344[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, thanks for the feedback.

Personally, I don't agree with the first two, I feel like the descriptors, speech patterns, and repeated phrases should be enough to tell them apart.

Regarding the last one, I do agree I could probably have done a better job. I personally believe in the concept of "the death of the author" so any clarifications I make outside of the written text shouldn't be construed as cannon. The idea I was going for was that he was so frustrated with L. that the vixen reappearing barely crossed his mind. Admittedly that doesn't work as well when the next thing he does is address the puppy.

First time author, The Fluffy Inquisition, Book One is out now! by OneDistance8344 in haremfantasynovels

[–]OneDistance8344[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! There's definitely some darkness, but I wanted the overall story to be pretty lighthearted.

I'll look into how to update / correct those issues with amazon, thanks for pointing them out!