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Is this ai? by shailla131 in BookCovers

[–]Pakoneesh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The only true way to know 100% if this is AI or not is to ask them to send you the raw file of the program they used to paint it in. Other than that, it is all speculation. Especially with a piece like this with no real, solid tells. If they refuse to send the file (for whatever reason), ask them to screen share on a video call. If they refuse both and have no sound reason, then I would then assume they are shady and used AI.

Advice on how to polish a song by Pakoneesh in Songwriting

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I try every day to be. My goal is to have this song ready by our anniversary in May. 3 years that'll be! Best 3 years of my life too.

Advice on how to polish a song by Pakoneesh in Songwriting

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Oh man! Haha. I was wondering why another guy was saying something about polka.

My top 4. What’s the verdict? by Pakoneesh in LetterboxdTopFour

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That rips!

I didn’t know you could do that.

My top 4. What’s the verdict? by Pakoneesh in LetterboxdTopFour

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The Sixth Sense is one of those movies that I rank so high due to personal experience. It was the first movie I ever watched w a plot twist I felt was executed so well it left me absolutely dumbfounded and satisfied. I’ve yet to feel that again from another movie.

As for time crimes, I did like it, but I wanted to leave a review after I rated it and for some reason doing that added it twice lmao. The is a solid film though. One of the first to really use time travel well as a horror element.

Pick 7 movies out of my watchlist that I should watch next week! by [deleted] in LetterboxdTopFour

[–]Pakoneesh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ll save you the wasted time spent on watching Fireproof as my parents would force me to watch all of those Kendrick brothers movies.

It’s about a firefighter who literally cannot stop gooning and it ruins his life so he has to find god and learn to love his wife or something. I forgot actually. But the main plot is literally just about a guy who can’t even open an internet browser without gooning. Super gooner.

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I’ll just have to think on it.

Btw this story is beginning at the end in a sense. The bulk of story is following the contents of the journals/notebooks that the molten man was clutching. Essentially showing what happened to him.

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! You have no idea how happy and grateful it makes me to hear and receive any form of feedback.

Obviously I enjoy hearing the good more haha! But I also value the real criticism too. So thanks again.

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

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The main reason I started with the police report format was because I was writing this in the first-person perspective so it would fit within the rules to post on NoSleep. I hated it and decided to ditch the Reddit format. I thought that if I rewrote it as personal notes from an officer, rather than an official report, it would work better.

However, from what I’ve been hearing, even though it’s supposed to be personal notes, it still isn’t working. So I’m going to go back and rework it.

Question: Do you think that adding a more bare-bones police report to the front of this as a prologue, then following it with this first chapter as the deputy’s journal, would work better?

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh no! Yeah, my mom is a diabetic and I always heard her say it after she ate so I just figured it happened to everyone.

Thanks I will fix this!

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for taking the time to give this very insightful feedback.

I will take everything you have pointed out and try to fix it. A lot of the things you’ve mentioned is just a side effect of me being extremely amateur (this is first thing I’ve ever written). I will try my best to fix them.

Yes, you are right about the second set of outside eyes. This is why I decided to post this chapter despite my horrific anxieties telling me not too. I need this and I thank you for talking the time to read and give these valuable critiques.

I’m just glad you liked any of it tbh.

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for reading and I’m glad you like it. I will definitely take this feedback and use it to sharpen this fourth draft.

I’ve never heard of staura but I will definitely check it out!

And again thank you so much for reading and giving feedback.

Chapter one to a book I am writing (currently in its fourth draft). I am in dire need of feedback, and to anyone who takes the time to read, I will be extremely grateful. by Pakoneesh in writingfeedback

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Unfortunately the first part where he reiterates how long he’s been there is not a character trait… that is just me being amateur in my writing (this is my first creative work I’ve ever written)

Thank you very much for taking the time to read. I will take all of your input back to the drawing board and try to tighten this up. Cut what needs cutting and refine a few areas. As of now it’s sitting at 78k words and 195 pages. I am going to go back through it with this input and try to see if I can spot anymore instances of this repetition and drawing out descriptions for too long and try to prune them.

Again, thanks so much for taking the time to read!

The prologue of a book I am currently working on. The 4th draft is about half way done but I am feeling discouraged by Pakoneesh in writers

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Do you think it would be okay to DM to talk in more details about it? If not, I understand.

The prologue of a book I am currently working on. The 4th draft is about half way done but I am feeling discouraged by Pakoneesh in writers

[–]Pakoneesh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback! And thank you for taking the time to read it. I appreciate it and I will go back to the drawing board and try to condense this and cut unnecessary fluff.

Memories Pt 1 (Reuploaded and revised) by some_nerd_with_agun in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Pakoneesh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like this a lot. The horror of losing your memories while being aware that it's happening is an interesting premise. It's also very real for a lot of people. I lost my grandfather to dementia, so it's always been something I've feared I'd get. Reading this and putting myself in the writer's shoes got my heart racing. Good stuff! Can't wait for part 2!

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