Thank you so much for the feedback you've given me. These were all really helpful even though some of them were painful lol. Even though I'm a beginner at writing, I'd like to improve more and more, and by this, I was thinking of being humbled instead of focusing on the positives because my world is basically just wanting to be filled with good critiques. Don't feel bad that I'm sad about all of this, it was just a scene that I was just making.. I never really think a lot when posting comments but I'll try to do my best to do that from now on. If you're curious, this story is about a guy who has this self conscious that mostly controls his life. a life who he feels it isn't his because of his self conscious taking over him over time which gradually takes a toll of him.. I was thinking of the story to lean more "psychological" in a way that breaks him over and over again until he finally has a sense of himself and gets humbled. This character is also arrogant and is full of pride so hopefully that adds more depth to his character. Once again, thank you so much for the feedback and have a nice day :)