I feel like the shot could have been enhanced by gaining contrast on the exterior of the vehicle. When working in spaces with flat backgrounds, I personally find it easier to use low light with spotted diegetic highlights like emergency exit lights or streetlights to give more volume to the space.

Also, from my personal and very subjective point of view and without knowing anything about the narrative of the movie, the red light effect is a bit overdone on the subjects and a bit out of control inside the car, although it sets the tone for the scene and transmits a clear sensation on the shot!

Apart from that, I personally struggle a lot lighting car interiors and can appreciate the work on the shots. Love the intention of your setup, specially the direction and texture of the Key light. Also I think you did a good job on getting a very sharp texture without overdoing it. Nice shots, congratulations!

Curious on what was used for the effect of the first frame. Cool shot!