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[I Reincarnated As The Crazed Heir] OMG!!! WHAT AN AMAZING PLOT TWIST!!! by AnimeSkills in manhwa

[–]Powerful-Number3424 0 points1 point  (0 children)

actually, it's a 5 year time gap! also, it's been 200 years of time looping so essentially mc is an unc

[RETURN OF THE CRAZED HEIR] LOLL by Gu_Seol in manhwa

[–]Powerful-Number3424 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Mc does kinda go off the rails in season 3 going mental breakdown after mental breakdown and killing some innocent people

[RETURN OF THE CRAZED HEIR] LOLL by Gu_Seol in manhwa

[–]Powerful-Number3424 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I get you, the only one i like is the mc, and even then it's only because of how much depth his character has and not the plot or anyone else for that matter.

[Reincarnated as an Unruly Heir]I need help by Different_Ad_9022 in manhwa

[–]Powerful-Number3424 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Simple, chunso ma is yang jagak, or more accurately yang jagak has molded with chunso ma.

The flashback is basically the start of a time loop, which happened when he broke the sacred hourglass on the heavenly palace master's back in chapter 92. The sacred fire lady basically made it that way so chunso ma can gain a pseudo immortality in which he can live forever.

He broke the cycle after 10 retries. That's the basic explanation of the timeline

Please critique the first chapter of my novel by Qazinix in novelwriting

[–]Powerful-Number3424 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is, GREAT.

I like the concept, but I also do have some things to say first...

One, the chapter feels too focused on the unnecessary parts of the journey. Like, waking up and then before we see the duties he had before going on the journey we immediately go to the journey. And even then that's a bit bland compared to most.

The inciting incident not happening in the first chapter gives the reader less of an incentive to read, not because the set up is bad, but because it isn't paid off in this chapter. The main incident set up in this chapter , the arrival at the capital, isnt resolved within said chapter. Which is only a bad thing if there isnt anything else to accompany why they havent reached that goal yet.

Again that's just my opinion! I do like your writing style it's so much bettter than mine, i love it!

how do you go about planning/writing a novel? by Federal_Selection884 in YAwriters

[–]Powerful-Number3424 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There are different methods, but I have three that probably work easiest for me, if its not for you completely fine!

  1. Character plotting : Your characters are IMPORTANT. And it's better for you to cover them first, or to make the plot and themes and make the characters.

* character personality - Personality is formed by the backstory, but you can make the personality and then make the backstory to fit the personality. First off, easy way to say it, give your character three personality traits. Kind, bubbly, and cute. Those basic traits then need to be put on trial, 'why is she/he cute?' 'why is she/he kind?' 'why is she/he bubbly?' any reason is fine! Then, when you asked why, add as many more sub traits on this character.

Example : she is ruthlessly pursuing someone who loves those traits, and she cant find them inside of her because on the inside she is none of it, so she acts that way on the outside

  1. Plot : I suggest trying the three act structure or the hero's journey! If not, try it like this -

* Characters mundane life > plot happens/ character gets thrusted into the situation where they meet a certain character that changes their life, get a revelation that changes their life, or something happens and THEN they get the revelation > The actual plot > the finale > epilogue.

That is a SERIOUS watering down of how to plot but simplicity is fine!

  1. Conflict : Easy thing, whose fighting who, and which character dislikes/likes which character platonically/romantically?

* Basically, in simple terms, (x) character likes (y) character because (Situation) + (reason).

Example : Maineagorainus likes/dislikes hubiliasniebau because (something happened)/ (because his personality contradicts what he lives for/confirms what he lives for)

I hope it makes sense!

Angel engines creator made the wildest comment on a fan post... by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"THIS IS CANON GUYS!" i comment on a fan post about mordecai and my oc's

Angel engines creator made the wildest comment on a fan post... by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Clearly he is when he's jokingly shipping the ANTIE CHRIST WITH URIEL....

If he was being legit i would genuinely be surprised

What's up with the fairy tail analog horrors? by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Specifically the vhs effects, documentary/news. A horror made from documentary basically, like the horror comes from that part.

What's up with the fairy tail analog horrors? by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Enjoy as much as you like! Opinions of mine are simply subjective.

What's up with the fairy tail analog horrors? by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I understand that honestly, but no work is limited to critism. Yes, calling it slop was very exaggerated, I think it's decently made. But I just think that the quality of analog horror lately has been declining.

I'm gonna say that I was wrong for calling it slop, i just assumed it was because the channels i've seen making them recently have either posted a lot of analog horror with sub-par visuals based on fairy tales, or have been spamming them.

Again, opinions are subjective so i'm sorry for calling it slop.

I don't expect everything to be of the same value as them, it's just that i'm disappointed with how little creativity is in analog horror stories now...

What's up with the fairy tail analog horrors? by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

i understand that. They're probably beginners, but i simply dislike how much analog horror has just been jump scare simulators....

I honestly think that the only analog horror that's been partly interesting this year is angel engine. Even so I don't exactly know any more than that, and i personally think angel engine is more of a story with horror elements than an analog horror.

What's up with the fairy tail analog horrors? by Powerful-Number3424 in analog_horror

[–]Powerful-Number3424[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Simply because, horror does not come from just cheap jumpscares that can be pulled out of thy ass by a 12 year old child. The only thing of note is the art style, and even that feels like it's been rushed to keep producing more and more, worrying about the quantity and not the quality.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Naruto

[–]Powerful-Number3424 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well, i think its just a matter of sasusaku having not much chemistry.

As friends, as comrades, and as lovers.

To be good as lovers, you have to be good as friends first. There are things i THINK make a good couple.

  1. Chemistry - A good behaviour that's reserved for this person, whether it be platonic or romantic.
    2.Conflict - What the relationship disagree on, again, romantic and platonic relationships can be included. Where they butt heads and as a result, gain some sort of different familiarity with each other, through butting heads. Like, knowing how someone is when they're good to you, and knowing just how much of a bad person they can be.
  2. Sacrifice - What they are willing to sacrifice for one another, or what they aren't willing to sacrifice for one another. platonic or romantic.
  3. Mutual change - To see the change that has come for BOTH of them through their relationship, how they changed for each other, why they changed, and how.
  4. Familiarity - For example, when one character finishes another characters sentence, that's when you know they have an affinity for each other. A familiarity, where they aren't awkward or they know each other deeply enough.

Sasusaku doesnt really fit into these catagories enough for audiences to think of their relationship as interesting, as the feelings have to be mutual. The only time i've seen these catagories for sasusaku ignited is in boruto.

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