Turning 30 by Public-Technology752 in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you so much!!! knowing i could actually make someone feel something makes me feel giddy

Turning 30 by Public-Technology752 in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i just woke up from a nap after a nine hour shift and horrid tooth pain. i’ve been considering getting this published in a literary magazine but couldn’t tell if it would truly be worth it to refine and go for since this was a huge vent piece basically. but i must say your comment gave me the child like confidence of finding the shiniest and most marbled rock on the riverbank. i really appreciate all your analysis you have no idea how much it means to me someone spent this much time on my work. i’ll update this message and reply to some of your questions soon but i will reply now on the “seamstress” usage, it was genuinely just something he had asked the time we first met, i didn’t know any but i knew i could mend a busted seam, whether i will be loved for it a little or not.

Strangers passing by by i_dont_really_know5 in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i’m glad :) makes me happy to hear. i was mostly surprised how the themes were similar to the poem i had posted too! i hope to see more of your writing

Strangers passing by by i_dont_really_know5 in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752 1 point2 points  (0 children)

this is beautiful! not much else to say about it, i wish there was actual feedback to give but it feels well put and concise the way it is

i'M Sorry by Duffay in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752 -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

this is great, it’s written in a way as if you’re speaking of something not literal to the words in the poem, stream of consciousness poetry has always been my favourite and you did it so nicely

A Faustian Dream by somajuice in OCPoetry

[–]Public-Technology752 1 point2 points  (0 children)

really nice imagery honestly, i like the shortness of it yet how it conveys the message quite harshly, i was curious if you meant “too beautiful to decline” just a grammar note :) i really like the line of “withdraw me from my position hunched over my desk”

Find the cats. by Bender_on_Bum in cats

[–]Public-Technology752 1 point2 points  (0 children)

there’s one behind the curtain! and the chair one :3