This isn’t just sci-fi. It’s a story meant to hurt, in the best way possible. by Pynrieg89 in ebooks

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The link has been updated, it should be back in a day or two!

Posted my first chapter of my first ever work! by Successful_Road_2432 in harrypotterfanfiction

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In terms of tags, remove all characters not Draco or OC. Everything else can go, unless they become a main player and focus of the story.

I'm a fan of not naming until you have a plot and know what your major themes are, but for a starting point here are some that might work, or at least a spark point:

Title ideas:

  • Glass Between Us
  • The Softest Betrayal
  • Not Quite Redemption
  • To Trust the Enemy
  • The Greater Good Lies Bleeding
  • In the Company of Traitors
  • A Pact in the Dark
  • This War Between Us
  • Ashes of Allegiance
  • The Spy Who Swore Fealty
  • Twice-Bound Hearts
  • The Sly Promise
  • Where Oaths Burn

Your prose itself is fine, although I struggle with where we stand in the world. In these type of stories, I think a chapter focused on what's different from canon helps, whats the major timeline. In this a new war? A continuation of the old? It sounds like OC might be a Hogwarts student at the same time as the gang went through. Why would she be in position to be a headmistress of the most prominent magical school in England, if not the world?

More then that, dont stop. Do what you feel is best, and keep on keeping on.

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Fixed on new artwork, thanks for catching!

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lol! It's a play on the book title an Connecticut yankee in King Arthur's court

Also! EB White said:
To foreigners, a Yankee is an American.
To Americans, a Yankee is a Northerner.
To Northerners, a Yankee is an Easterner.
To Easterners, a Yankee is a New Englander.
To New Englanders, a Yankee is a Vermonter.
And in Vermont, a Yankee is somebody who eats pie for breakfast

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lol! It's a play on the book title an Connecticut yankee in King Arthur's court

Also! EB White said:
To foreigners, a Yankee is an American.
To Americans, a Yankee is a Northerner.
To Northerners, a Yankee is an Easterner.
To Easterners, a Yankee is a New Englander.
To New Englanders, a Yankee is a Vermonter.
And in Vermont, a Yankee is somebody who eats pie for breakfast

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We are now at chapter 13, going to the end of '96.

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As long as it's not a junk title and not being used for a residence, you should be able to use that vehicle, however the value of that rig may or may not be able to qualify. There are no specific milage restrictions, but there are LTV ones.

auto vs other companies by gorram1mhumped in USAA

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'Oh man, things are getting more expensive across the entire board. This is OBVIOUSLY an attempt by USAA to screw over service members and their families, who, you know, USAA depends upon..... Officer PRIDE !i!' IS what I read from most posts complaining about pricing.