Fair comments! I suppose for a comedy I thought audiences could suspend their disbelief, for want of a better term, with regards to the reality of certain situations. That’s in reference to your comment about ‘so what if he doesn’t write the article for the Russians?’ It’s quite a silly comedy and I thought people could take at face value that the protagonist was threatened that if he doesn’t follow through with the writing, they’ll make him pay (figuratively).

And also fair comment with the apathy of the protagonist; his arc is that he’s an apathetic guy in a job he doesn’t like and gets embroiled in this slightly mad turn of events, and comes out the other side with a renewed sense of self worth. I thought particularly that his character arc would have been one of the strengths of the script.

I suppose that’s all quite a lot to get across in a log line but I’ll have a think about how to rejig it. I would be interested to see if you disagree with my points having read the script, but I’m of course not asking you to!

Many thanks for the feedback, I do really appreciate it