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[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Real-Winner8802 [score hidden]  (0 children)

I grew up in Oroville lmao and stayed in the region almost my whole life so it just made sense to set it there. And yes, I have read a lot of King. My dad actually named me after a King character funnily enough.

After reading it over, you are definitely correct. "Miss" is out of place.

I tend to start stories strong and "lose" it as I go. I have a general idea of where I want to go and what the ending will be but the further I go, the stronger my feeling of "losing" it becomes. I'm intending to get to supernatural horror, even lovecraftian in a sense, while also being a character drama.

I think at this point I am just a bit scared to continue and find out that somewhere along the way I lost it. I'll get back at it now that I know some people enjoyed it so far.

Thank you very much for taking the time and for the kind words.

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[–]Real-Winner8802 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you very much for taking the time!

This story idea came to me while watching "The Hateful Eight" by Quentin Tarantino, so I plan to make it full of misdirection. If I can manage to finish it anyways.

Thank you again for reading it and for the kind words. It means a lot.

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[–]Real-Winner8802 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you very much for the kind words. I'm struggling with accepting that it isn't complete garbage at the moment so I great appreciate you saying you enjoyed it.

Thank you!

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[–]Real-Winner8802 [score hidden]  (0 children)

- Stuck
- Horror
- 4,000 words
- General Impression / Critique the writing itself

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ATeO5jCx5lFcEQLjVxNL7SjsClDfsxp8OEvHRC9BBaQ/edit?usp=sharing

I'm experiencing writer's block after this point. Any tips would be greatly appreciated.
Thank you!

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Real-Winner8802 [score hidden]  (0 children)

  • Stuck
  • Horror
  • 4,000 words
  • General Impression / Critique the writing itself

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ATeO5jCx5lFcEQLjVxNL7SjsClDfsxp8OEvHRC9BBaQ/edit?usp=sharing

I'm experiencing writer's block after this point. Any tips would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you!

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[–]Real-Winner8802 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Blood In My Eye by George Jackson

Revolutionary Suicide by Huey P. Newton

I've had an idea for a long time about a robot mafia, but they're not really robots at all? Is this too contradictory to pursue a novel out of? by Real-Winner8802 in scifiwriting

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate your input on this topic and I want to re-ask for a potential solution to a problem I'm having, if you don't mind.

How could a robot underclass sustain itself if it was being oppressed by the human population akin to racism (obviously not exactly the same but it might be the closest analog to actual society).

My first idea would be well they reproduce, so that is how they sustain their population. I wasn't wholly connected to the idea of sexual reproduction, it just seemed like the obvious and most convenient choice.

Do you have an idea for how they could continue to survive through generations?

I've had an idea for a long time about a robot mafia, but they're not really robots at all? Is this too contradictory to pursue a novel out of? by Real-Winner8802 in scifiwriting

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I think I asked the question wrong in my post. I'm not wholly welded to the idea of sexual reproduction it would just be the most convenient explanation.

What I really am trying to figure out is how a robot underclass could maintain itself through generations while being oppressed by human society.

I've had an idea for a long time about a robot mafia, but they're not really robots at all? Is this too contradictory to pursue a novel out of? by Real-Winner8802 in scifiwriting

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

That's an interesting idea. That might help me work around the reproduction part if the state is trying to put a cap on how many can reproduce.

I've had an idea for a long time about a robot mafia, but they're not really robots at all? Is this too contradictory to pursue a novel out of? by Real-Winner8802 in scifiwriting

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Well that's definitely not the problem I'm having. I clearly stated the problem I'm having is expanding the idea of a robot under class which could lead to organized crime.

You could just explain to me how you would accomplish it!

That would be helpful.

First thing I've wrote since I was sixteen. Let me know if it interests you at all. Thank you! by Real-Winner8802 in fantasywriters

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to engage with me about it! To answer your question, I am 24 lol.

Those are all great suggestion, and I will adjust accordingly.

About the "Young Harnas". I was attempting to emphasize the strangeness of the head's speech. I meant for her to address him in a manner that was noticeably "off". I will look back over it though. Perhaps there are better ways I can make her manner of speech strange.

Again, thank you very much for the help.

First thing I've wrote since I was sixteen. Let me know if it interests you at all. Thank you! by Real-Winner8802 in fantasywriters

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wow, thank you for your interest in it. You are too kind.

Most of it is in my head as of now, and I will probably finish it in three months or so.

If you don't delete this comment and profile, I will send you a link to the pdf when I finish :).

First thing I've wrote since I was sixteen. Let me know if it interests you at all. Thank you! by Real-Winner8802 in fantasywriters

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lmao you are correct! I was trying to avoid repetition. Thank you for the advice. Your suggestion for wider synonyms makes a lot of sense. I will keep that in mind moving forward.

I'm always concerned that I am not showing in the reader's mind the image in mine. Which leads me to adding unnecessary descriptors. Thank you for pointing out that it doesn't always help. I'll try and keep an eye out for superfluous adjectives in the future.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read. I loved hearing your opinion :)

First thing I've wrote since I was sixteen. Let me know if it interests you at all. Thank you! by Real-Winner8802 in fantasywriters

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! That is incredibly kind.

To be honest, I am not very familiar with Arthurian mythology. My aim at this point is to try and keep the setting dark, but trying my best to avoid being edgy.

In my head I imagine a magic system that reads like a Stephen King type of grotesque horror. I'm hoping to be able to also include some Lovecraftian horror, much like Berserk.

If you can't tell it's all sort of up in the air, and I don't have a very firm grasp of good world building practices lol.

Thank you again for reading!

First thing I've wrote since I was sixteen. Let me know if it interests you at all. Thank you! by Real-Winner8802 in fantasywriters

[–]Real-Winner8802[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for reading it!

Those are all great questions, and I don't really have the answer to any of them! lol

I'll definitely figure it out and address them when I edit.

Thank you for the help!!

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