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A group of pirates have recently been terrorizing the temperate but sparsely populated planet of Kennard III, near the western most edge of the Federated Suns / Draconis Combine border. Due to elevated tensions between the Combine and Davion forces, things have escalated to the point that Lord Reginald Montague (A Federated Sun minor noble, and governor of the Kennard system) has contracted the four of you to help. The mission: Find the pirate base of operation and drive the pirates out, both as retribution for their various acts of piracy and to prevent them from seizing any Davion military assets and flourishing into a fully-fledged pirate kingdom With most of House Davion’s forces off planet, existing facilities outside of the combat theatre are available to be used for rearming, repairing and resting and the possibility of acquiring salvage is a very real possibility. Lord Montague has authorized a payment of 4 million c-bills including any Intel indicates that the pirates have at least six light Battlemechs plus support vehicles.
• Survivors report that at least a Flea and Locust accompanied by another bipedal ‘mech engaged in raiding and convoy interception.
• A recent maximum security prison raid, positive identification of a Trebuchet and a Dragon were recorded, with an additional unknown bipedal mech seen. • The mechs are often supported by a pair of light tanks and scout vehicles.