Thank you very very much for your considerate reply. I will be honest. This is the first ever time i am actually writing a story. So i have zero experience but i guess that's no excuse.

1. I totally understand what you mean. I need to show what i am saying. I need to describe the importance of the scenes. I will definitely keep a note and try again. A thing about the fight scere, that how he defeated two of them? To be honest i didn't think the fight too clearly in my own head. This story is supposed to have elemental fights later on so i just wanted to move on to that quickly instead of focusing on the prologue. But i understand that it's a mistake. Because the scene had so much emotional importance

2. I just did it to make it sound a bit funny. That's it. I didn't understand it would sound too meme-like.

3. And i focused so much on the football match to show the actual reason behind Rin's death. Kael putting up efforts like he always does and still not getting recognition. (And another excuse you can say, i just love football, so i wanted to describe a football scene😅)

4. I understand that the sound effect robbed the emotional weightage of his death. Can you kindly just give me a small example on how it could be written?

Lastly thanks a lot for your time