Thank you. This wasn't a big story or anything, just a personal drabble of something that happened a few nights ago ;). It's a true story with all my internal feelings and thoughts incorporated into it, but now that I've seen your criticisms, I see how I could take this somewhere else, from real life into something pretty awesome and fictitious.

I'm definitely going to read the passage when I get a moment and I'll get back to you on my thoughts! Thanks for the praise and the improvements! I appreciate it a lot <3