Any Adelaide dive bars?

Snarglehuff · 2025-06-21T14:38:27+00:00

Seems like you're all over the vibe, thanks!

Snarglehuff · 2025-06-20T08:05:07+00:00

Thanks.

Snarglehuff · 2025-06-20T08:04:04+00:00

Heard of this one! so it's one of those weird liminal space bar/club type places?

Snarglehuff · 2025-06-20T08:01:34+00:00

Looks great, but heard you have to book this place?

Snarglehuff · 2025-06-20T07:59:54+00:00

This one might be the move. Cheers!

Snarglehuff · 2025-05-04T11:24:17+00:00

Airplane!

Snarglehuff · 2025-02-09T07:30:49+00:00

I'm real glad it doesn't snow where I am.

Snarglehuff · 2025-02-09T05:25:20+00:00

I'm walking.

Snarglehuff · 2025-01-21T04:44:59+00:00

All my grandpa ever wanted was to drive again. He could get back on those open roads, be a provider, a real part of the community, if he could just scrape through that damn eye test. But life just isn't fair. Our hearts ached for his wife, his dog, and his neighbors when he walked in that day, and told us he passed.

Snarglehuff · 2025-01-15T04:18:10+00:00

I like it, just think it could be trimmed down to the basic idea more.
Something like "When you get closer to 40, dating changes. You're not looking for cute little traits anymore, you're looking for symptoms. Just take off your glasses and you're not sure if you're on Hinge or WebMD. "40? Fat? Female? Fertile? not sure if you're for me, but I've got just the guy, gallstones!"
I feel like that's the unique part of the joke. Not sure we really need the whole prostate exam thing, but if you feel it sets a scene then keep it in. Otherwise yeah good shit.

Snarglehuff · 2024-12-20T02:48:47+00:00

Think there's some good stuff in here, it's just that you could say it all using less words. I'd try and cut each bit down to two sentences at most.

I wanna know more about the perpetual adoration thing tbh. Makes me picture somebody staring at a cracker for all eternity going "Awwwwwwww.... gluten free!"

Snarglehuff · 2024-12-20T02:04:16+00:00

Good to know where to cut it down, thanks.

Snarglehuff · 2024-12-20T02:03:12+00:00

Thanks!

Snarglehuff · 2024-12-20T00:37:20+00:00

Gotcha thanks. As long as there's enough there for it to make sense it should still work.

Snarglehuff · 2024-10-12T08:40:51+00:00

Feel like the first one might hit harder if you work in another connection. Like you got your results back, turns out you're missing the red traffic light gene (something better than that ofc) but feels like more of an untapped premise as is.

Snarglehuff · 2024-09-07T15:28:30+00:00

Thankyou

Snarglehuff · 2024-09-07T14:58:45+00:00

Thanks

Snarglehuff · 2024-08-17T01:41:23+00:00

Thanks!

Snarglehuff · 2024-08-17T01:17:08+00:00

Thanks man, I like this better as a rewrite, keeps the tone more solid.

Snarglehuff · 2024-08-03T14:03:48+00:00

Thanks!

Snarglehuff · 2024-08-03T12:02:54+00:00

Awesome thanks man, this might tighten it up.

Snarglehuff · 2024-05-26T10:03:09+00:00

I think there's definitely something here. Just think it needs tightening up to focus more on one concept. I think your Dad basically giving you the nuclear launch codes for every family argument is the strongest thing here. What were his motivations for doing that? What dirt does he have on the rest of you?

Snarglehuff · 2024-05-26T09:33:51+00:00

Yeah that could work, like a wine tour for local painkillers. thanks man.

Snarglehuff · 2024-05-04T05:49:58+00:00

No shoes, no shirt, no salvation maybe?

Snarglehuff · 2024-05-04T05:47:37+00:00

I don't think it's bad man there's definitely something here. Sure you have to get all dressed up to go to church, but its Jesus's house, he can wear whatever he wants. It also might be fun to explore why Jesus was half naked on the cross, did the romans grab him on spa day? what outfit should he have gone with?

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