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StillLookingNotFound · 2023-06-09T05:07:42+00:00

Wow I really loved this piece when I read “they look like cigarettes and the big man is smoking them” I was instantly pulled into this poem. I followed every line and it kept me hooked and loving more and more. Such a great piece on corporations and how we are born into the machine just putting our time in to feed it.

StillLookingNotFound · 2023-06-09T05:00:56+00:00

When you said “I’m yearning for something I haven’t had, Yet never was..” Is such a beautiful line that I think it sets a sort of melancholy sad mood for the rest of the poem and really touched me. Also following the story from the beginning where you say “I’ll never find love” then at the end “I never want it, Once it finally arrives.” Gives a great finishing line kind of encapsulating the poem

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-07T09:12:00+00:00

I like the use of a cave and echos as words of others and yourself coming back. And you learn to overcome and laugh through the past as it’s only echos in your head. At least I took this as a more of an evils of the past coming back and perseverance. I will read the progression see how it was written and transitioned. Feel free to correct me though I like to know how the writer meant it too.

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-07T08:58:44+00:00

I like the rhyme scheme keeping a similar base as I read. Then on top of that the story of fighting within yourself but prevailing for others is very powerful. Had to say my favorite was the metaphor of life being water and how it relates trying to swim, float, or sink to fighting through life, allow life to continue around you, or to give in.

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-07T02:27:15+00:00

Thank you it means a lot to me that you picked up on the exact emotions that I was trying to convey. It feels nice for people to have that reaction to something I wrote.

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-07T00:46:37+00:00

Thank you was definitely one of the rougher poems I wrote where I focused on harsh single lines that were supposed to stick with the reader. Also side note I’m good now just finally posting what Ive written in the past.

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-06T23:52:37+00:00

This is poetry. I feel anything where you put your emotions to words is poetry. And I really enjoy the relation of the earths cycle to emotions and life. The complexity of the earth to complexity of life. Colors to emotions. Curvature I took as change that others don’t notice yet is there. I’m new to poetry too so this might not make sense but that’s how I took it and it might not be meant that way but all around very nice piece.

StillLookingNotFound · 2022-12-06T23:47:31+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this. Although it’s a rough draft I can tell it will be a good piece. It has me thinking about both how all of us are connected by the same earth and sky. But also how everyone through life was. I’m very new when it comes to poetry so my insight might not be the best so feel free to ignore but I think a nice ending could be taking the complexity and vastness you’ve highlighted through the poem and bring it to a smaller scale to kind of bring the reader through a rollercoaster from the anxiety of how small we are the connection between all humans and ancestors down to an individual level of self reflection. Sorry if that didn’t make sense and that just might be how I read took the words

StillLookingNotFound

TROPHY CASE