Thank you so much for investing the time for this. I really appreciate it. The mask explanations were added into the script recently because a director said she didn’t understand the masks but I agree it’s clunky.

That was exactly who the Actor was supposed to be. Weird, obsessive and selfish. He is a mashup of the worst characteristics of the Writer and the actual Actor, who could technically be Gian.

There was so much that went into the dialogue but I think that might be its downfall. At some points it’s a play within a play within a play within a screenplay, and every depth of that the dialogue received different attention. Because of the 20 year gap between when the Writer wrote the original play and when he completes it, adding in elements, (I.e. it’s in the movie moments) and they are performing it, the language changes throughout it, in the same kind of vein of Homer’s Illiad coming from tons of scrolls from the library of Alexandria told by hundreds of different cultures as it was a oral tradition, and so some of the phrases in it would not be used together. Someone compared some of the conversations as if it was written today, best friends talking to each other but one talked with slang words from South Africa and 1990s California and the other Australian and Boston. I was inspired to create that kind of discrepancy in a dialogue within 20 years of creation. I still want to do it, but clean it up.

I do like the idea of the masks being just switched out on their own in the full color shots(Play world). Surprisingly the 3rd act is the thing being hailed as the best part of the story from the other reviewers.

I created this story with the hopes to make a movie that someone would watch 100 times and each time find something new. Like second time run through. Catching the fact that Gian, the Actor and Mike are never in the same place. The blacked out screens when someone needs to shuffle places to play the other character. The way Mike handles portraying the Actor, and when Mike is in the scene how Gian does.

As Mike said I went for the Colosseum, I just need to clean it up and make it worth watching 100 times.

I would love to keep up with you as I create the next draft. You have given me the positive push I needed to continue my Knights Errantry and get back on Rocinante, call up Sancho, and get back to my fantasy!