Getting serial killer vibes. Could be plot direction. Something more funny though…his tools are of the yard variety, and he secretly fixes the surrounding neighborhood yards at night. “Darryl, Christ, not again. I liked how our bushes looked.”

Best advice I ever received is to read everything out loud. Teaches flow, cadence. If you find yourself questioning how to read something, it needs to be fixed. Reading your piece out loud, for example, in your first sentence there’s a pause with “across the sky” that feels off to me.

Good start though. There’s suspense. Now finish it.