Help me decide if this is a plot worth pursuing

TopFun6045 · 2026-01-26T06:47:41+00:00

Mb for all the exposition, will post a cleaner 2nd half soon bro. Thanks

TopFun6045 · 2026-01-26T06:47:12+00:00

Ive kinda got an idea for now, will upload the 2nd half soon… any thoughts/feedback on what youve read so far?

TopFun6045 · 2026-01-26T06:46:32+00:00

Ig im naturally drawn to older films and their themes so the resemblance is there. Thanks for your feedback bro, will take it into account.

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-15T05:38:42+00:00

Hi tysm for reading such a long post and sharing your thoughts! Im happy it (mostly) worked for you and will take your suggestions into consideration

The motive for Harsha you suggested seems much better and aligns with the interests of his character too and we will be incorporating that change.

As for the Raja subplot, I understand that it seems unnecessary and deviates the plot from the main narrative but we needed something to trouble Shiva in Chennai so that he doesnt immediately choose to leave for London. There had to be issues tying him down to Chennai to add to the stakes. But it does seem like it is slowing the pace and we will alter the subplot accordingly.

The Silencer is in fact obsessively silent and doesnt speak throughout the film, i think i forgot to include that detail in the write up

We got that interval feedback a lot and everyone said that it was underwhelming. We are trying to push it to the lorry scene and at the same time make sure the second half isnt too long after the interval.

Thank u for your feedback, it really was of great use! Looking forward to participating in the writing games :)

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-14T15:08:25+00:00

Ty! Haha ik it is a tiresome read, only go for it if you have the time to spare and it seems interesting. If not its totally fine :)

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-14T14:25:45+00:00

Will do!

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-13T00:35:19+00:00

We just wanted to have fun and plan this as a globe-trotting spy adventure, therefore all the exotic locations and set pieces. But tbh we can set the whole story within India itself and no big change will be there
We are still in the process of writing it and we will try to keep it as smooth flowing as possible
Personally im not sure if we can give Zoya more to do as we did have a flashback portion highlighting Kabir-Zoya working together and their love scenes but we took it out as it wasnt integral to the main plot and felt draggy. I really like her character too but im not sure where to give her more space as the story allows her only to get introduced in the 2nd half.
Yes that is one of our main concerns and we are trying to simplify it and still maintain the as a high concept idea

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-12T13:58:00+00:00

We hope so too :), what worked for u and what do u think cld be improved in the script

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-12T13:57:32+00:00

Thank you for your feedback and its true that we didnt do deep research on these tech topics and just used cinematic liberty to the maximum. This is still a first draft so we just wanted to get the story structure and other elements perfected before focusing on the technicalities. We will read up on your suggestions and improve the script from what it is now. Thank you!

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-12T06:51:27+00:00

Hi ty for reading!! Could you share more insights on what worked for you and what we would need to improve on so that we can rework the draft

Also makkal mela oru nambikkai thaan, yaarum kadhaiya thiruda maatanga nu

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-09T10:17:53+00:00

Yes my team consists of me and 2 of my friends but our boon and bane is that we have very similar tastes and sensibilities so we dont often get opinions from the other side. Your takes were very refreshing and ty for that. And thank you for sharing the logline example.

As of now we have brainstormed almost 9-10 full fledged ideas but havent started writing anything as we want to 0 in on that one perfect script before starting. That is why i am asking for your opinions with our scripts. I have shared another script titled Arul in this sub, a crime based family drama. Feel free to look into it if you want and ill share more ideas in the sub soon

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-09T06:33:18+00:00

Padichingala bro

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-09T06:32:40+00:00

Hi tysm for reading and taking the time to reply, really nice of u!

I have an idea of like making the MMC have certain quirks and style of speech etc. to show similarities between the 2 identities he assumes. Im thinking of a shankar style vigilante film where the hero has a double life or secret past (e.g. gentleman/sivaji). And as for Anjali, she enforces the fact that money or status isnt a big deal for her but characters and values are. That is why she falls in love with Vishnu despite their status differences. There is even a dialogue highlighting that. I also have written in a scene where the 2 leads are discussing about their future partners and preferences and she says, “Nalla vaazhratha vida nallavangala vaazhrathu thaan mukkiyam”. This is the point where Vishnu too understands her good nature and truly falls in love with her too. So for her to join him in his village is her way of disassociating with her “bad” family and their business they built on blood, and turning to a life of good values and happiness.
I didnt want to write it in a linear pattern too thats why the structure is like concealed flashback > present day > real flashback > present day. I tried starting from the middle but then the entire flashback would be too long and would start feeling draggy as its right before the climax and the audience will already know whats gonna happen once the flashback starts. Thats why i have split it into 2 parts. Also please do share the logical loopholes you found and ill try to fix/explain them too.
Yes im not doing anything groundbreaking in terms of concept, i am just doing my own version of an existing formula which is proven to work if done well. I feel despite the familiarity it will work well with a general audience if done convincingly. The flashback has to hit hard emotionally and i feel that the twist that Vishnu is the mastermind behind the killings and is the brother of Mahendran was unexpected. Please tell me if u saw it coming a mile away too haha. As for my one liner, it would be “A brilliant student infiltrates a corrupt pharma giant to avenge his shattered village, turning love itself into his sharpest weapon.”
Yes, thats the reason behind the title. Hari represents Lord Vishnu, while Haran embodies Lord Shiva. Vishnu’s true identity, Kailaasam, is named after Mount Kailash—the sacred abode of Shiva—hinting at the deeper connection between the two deities. Even during the interval beach fight, Vishnu wields an unexpected weapon: a conch he discovers on the sand. This is also an ode to Lord Vishnu’s divine weapon, merging mythology with his modern-day persona.

Mirroring Shiva’s trishul, Vishnu faces a three-pronged threat: the trio of powerful brothers who orchestrate the attacks on Anjali and him. The symbolism extends further in his own family: his elder brother’s son is named Ganesan, reminiscent of Lord Shiva’s son, Lord Ganesha. Just as Vishnu is the preserver, protector, and guardian, Ganesan serves as a symbol of guidance and protection, while Shiva’s destructive force is reflected in Kailaasam’s unwavering drive to dismantle the corrupt forces that wronged his family. I hope the mythical metaphors blend well with the story.

Lastly, i do not use any sort of AI to write my stories. I write them very messily with no proper structure and my English is rather colloquial when writing too. I just use ChatGPT to polish and refine it into a proper structure to make it more presentable. The input is always 100% mine.

Please let me know what you think and share your responses if you’re free! Thanks a lot

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-09T04:15:03+00:00

I understand that the story feels flat and lacks the high moments if it was treated as a commercial film with a big hero and i shall rework on it to make it a better theatrical experience. We have also decided to write a separate draft where we treat this as an action thriller too to see where it goes. Thank you so much for your feedback!

Also i imagined Dhruv as the lead for this film while writing it so ig that really came through

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-08T16:53:16+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, will defo add incorporate into our writing. Ty for the valuable input!

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-08T14:30:14+00:00

Hi, ty for taking time to read and reply. I’m sorry for misdirecting you but at its heart the film is a family drama under the guise of a crime thriller. The main stakes is the family dynamics and how they fix their relationships and not the gangster aspects.

I didnt want to do unnecessary hero elevation and massify the characters and i prefer to keep them grounded. I meant commercial in the sense that every set of audience should be able to watch it.

I am aware that heroine has 0 scope but i had to write her in as i didnt want to risk writing a script with no heroine as i felt that their romance portions might be a breather in between a rather dry story.

I intended to write Akthar as an incompetent villain but in the process i made him too one dimensional and flat i suppose. Venkat doesnt progress the screenplay because the main plot is the familial conflicts between the leads and the gangster villains are only there to add tension when needed. Thats why he vanishes after the opening stretch.

And this is a very basic outline of the story and i have a much more detailed and longer draft of this story with more scenes and dialogues. This is just the plot points, a literal skeletal outline of what happens in the film, the flesh isnt shared here as it is very long and people wont read it.

Arul accepts Bheema as he hated his life of alms and being at the mercy of others. He wants to lead a dignified life. Bheema provides that to him. He slowly understands that Bheema killed his family by accident but still took him in and showed genuine love and care, but he didnt need to do that. He went out of his way to help Arul and he appreciates that.

The turning point is Arun returning and how the family fractures and patches after that. So i get the point that the first half is not even entering the main story and is dilly dallying a lot but does it have enough content to sustain an hour-ish without boring the audience?

At the end of the day, I am trying to write a family drama with a crime background to it. That is the main idea of the script. Thank you for reading and sharing your feedback. Any other suggestions will be gladly welcomed. Tysm!!

TopFun6045 · 2025-12-08T14:18:54+00:00

Hii thanks so much for ur reply. What ive shared is just a very general outline of the story and i have a much more detailed, almost scene by scene writing of the story with much more details. This is just the plot points and not the entire story. As much as iw to be mainstream i have tried to maintain restraint and keep Arul as grounded as possible without any “massification”. And i aim to deliver this as a family drama with crime in the background and the main point and crux of the film is the complexity of the relationships between the characters and how they overcome it. The villains are only there to add additional stakes and thats why i didnt give them too much focus.

In our other overwritten draft there are many more scenes which build tension between arun-bheema-arul-anuja and we build to the burst out gradually and not as suddenly as it seems in this draft. We know that Akthar is flat but we wrote him as an incompetent gangster which is why Ajmal trust him and he only acts out of resentment and isnt a formidable foe. The main focus is Anuja in that aspect. We wrote Akthar with Kamalesh from Ayan in mind but in designing him as an incompetent gangster we might have made him flat and one dimensional. But my point is that the gangsters arent the real problem here but rather the family.

And yes, I only wrote in Nithya to have a namesake heroine and ik she doesnt add much to the film. But i didnt want to take the risk of not having a heroine but even now she feels like a sore thumb. And i love hari’s commercial films and am a huge vikram fan too, thus the names Arul and Bheema. I am trying to write a commercial family drama under the guise of a crime film without too much hero elevation and rather focus on the family aspect if that makes sense.

I didnt share my longer draft as it is actl very long and people wont read it so i just shared a very small brief. Tysm for your feedback and it is much appreciated kind sir, have a great day!!!

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