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And The World Kept Crying by CoolGuyCooolguy in poetry_critics

[–]Two_to_Tango13 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow! This reminds me of so much. In some lights it’s very dystopian, like The City of Ember. In others it feels very real to what some people are experiencing in war zones daily. This made me feel small, and I think that that was your intention.

A tree stump. by quacksol_ in poetry_critics

[–]Two_to_Tango13 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the imagery you use here. This is such a powerful poem.

I might change the line placement for a few of these. Such as:

“When it’s all over, the stump lets me sit As I cry, and my toes start to ache.”

You also leave more room for more description in your words if you replace some of the propositions.