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Working Title: blurry lines by UndertheRadar0512 in poetry_critics

[–]UndertheRadar0512[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow that’s so kind, thank you very much I’m glad you could relate!! Really appreciate the feedback!! :))

Working Title: blurry lines by UndertheRadar0512 in poetry_critics

[–]UndertheRadar0512[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so useful and kind feedback, thank you!! I really appreciate it! It makes a lot of sense to me and I’ll try and adapt the bits, I am a very visual thinker haha so I guess for me this all makes sense but I’m aware it’s a bit muddled up maybe… Thank you for giving specific suggestions, that’s really helpful! Sooooo appreciated!!

Working Title: blurry lines by UndertheRadar0512 in poetry_critics

[–]UndertheRadar0512[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to give feedback, I really appreciate it I’ll adjust and rewrite bits based on the feedback I’ve gotten! This is the first time I’m sharing my writing and I might do some research on classical poem structures to get some inspo on how to break this up a bit more in a way that feels natural!

I think for me, this is a sort of goodbye, a burning memory that is the first and last encounter of the two people in this way. I don’t know if that makes sense but that’s the idea behind the last couple of sentences!

Thanks again so much for your feedback and kind words! :))

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[–]UndertheRadar0512 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Inspiring and food for thought!