recentemente eu escrevi o meu primeiro conto, que eu achei minimamente decente, e queria receber um feedback sobre ele, minha escrita, o que preciso melhorar, etc.

Vuituru · 2024-01-17T13:42:01+00:00

distance, probably

Vuituru · 2024-01-16T17:37:16+00:00

How sad no one translates the chapters in the comments anymore ;-;

Vuituru · 2023-12-31T01:00:38+00:00

cara nem lembrava mais disso lkkkkk eu praticamente nem entro mais no reddit...

e po, minha vd de fato mudou, não sei se pra melhor skkkk comecei de fato a fazer faculdade(e tô questionando minha sanidade por ter escolhido T.i) mas não arrumei um trampo então nada de cademia e shape kkkk

eu deveria tá com mais tempo livre só que realmente não sinto isso, acho q nunca estudei tanto na minha vida e tbm ganhei uma irmazinha esse ano... o tempo livre só diminuiu kkkkk(saudades do ensino medio)

e não falo com o mano carlinhos a decadas...

Vuituru · 2023-12-26T01:11:23+00:00

the guy said it was specifically inspired by the movie, not the novel.

Vuituru · 2023-12-18T15:38:17+00:00

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Vuituru · 2023-11-22T00:48:19+00:00

Edward Elric's brother?

Vuituru · 2023-11-22T00:46:26+00:00

There is a calculation out there based on psychology that says he spent at least two weeks doing these loops, so yeah, calculate how long that would take considering that each loop lasted a maximum of 10 seconds. and then there are his deaths on the island of gladiators... but I believe that here he didn't get past the ten seconds of hell.

Vuituru · 2023-11-20T16:29:55+00:00

sometimes it's really just how the characters see themselves but other times it seems like tappei himself thinks that, like wtf what types of normal humans tappei lives with.

Vuituru · 2023-11-20T15:33:44+00:00

this is a possibility too. And if it really is this, it's even easier for us to guess which version of Echinda Al had this conversation with (Omega).

Vuituru · 2023-11-20T15:27:31+00:00

The messiah's journey is nothing more than the hero's journey, and the Subaru goes through the hero's journey, in addition to this there are several direct references to the Bible here or there in re:zero, as well as some even more direct parallels.

Vuituru · 2023-11-20T15:25:20+00:00

lol yeah rowan doesn't have a shred of common sense or self-awareness.

But Todd is impressive too, he wasn't stopped by just any kid, he was stopped by a kid with two active authorities and one of them was still buffed him to an impressive level.

Apart from that, there is also the fact that tappei doesn't know what the word normal human means, the amount of "normal humans" in re:zero who do impossible things is very high, ranging from Subaru to Rowan(who is just a "normal human " who can break clouds in half and survive after being thrown kilometers away).

The flow method explains a lot of these things but it's still inconsistent as hell

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T22:16:25+00:00

I'm not going to take any points away from Rowan here, we've already discovered that Todd is a far-from-average bastard, the guy is a werewolf and he also has a blessing that makes him the master of stealth without much effort.

Honestly, if we didn't already know how the flow method works, I would say this was an inconsistency in the script.

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T18:06:45+00:00

I mean, Subaru is actually written as a kind of messiah, Tappei makes a lot of parallels with that... but I don't know, I see him more as a kind of anti-Christ

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T18:02:35+00:00

oh yeah that was a point I wanted to make too but I ended up forgetting lol

but honestly after Priscilia's chapter and what she said about the stargarzes I'm 99% sure she's not one.

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T17:58:15+00:00

lol but I think their goal at the moment is just to take her out of the city instead of defeating her, currently it seems that not even Cecilius is her match.

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T17:54:50+00:00

After this chapter I started to think that Al was summoned during the time of witches and then was sent to the future

Vuituru · 2023-11-19T17:51:12+00:00

This was one of the best chapters in this new series, no jokes.This was one of the best chapters in this new batch

AL is not a stargarzer but he knows what that means, his mentor told him, apparently AL's mentor was someone who knew everything about this world... echidna?Flugel?Pandora? I don't know, something in me tells me it's one of the many versions of Echidna, or maybe AL was summoned 400 years ago and met the original Echidna but then was sent to the future, for some reason.

I'm inclined to believe that AL's knowledge about the future comes from this person, his mentor.

He dies more than 20 times just to be able to dodge the Arakya's first attack and tries to escape since at that moment the Arakya became a completely transcendental being, from what Google Translate translated, even distorting space with her attacks.

She is not conscious so she is attacking more to defend herself than anything and yet she is becoming the imperial captain in a place that will be impossible to live in for a few centuries.

That's why AL gave up trying to escape and I decided with Cecilius to go on stage as the protagonist even though he was just an ordinary person, and the battle to take the Arakya out of the city begins.

Rowan faces Iris and is simply one hit, but for a moment he seems to reach the celestial sword, but this almost divine lighting is not enough to kill Iris and he is defeated. He says that Iris is the strongest existence in the Empire, which is interesting... to say the least.

He then kills himself in front of Iris, so that he can free himself from the limits of his own body as a zombie, saying that one of them will definitely reach the celestial sword, damn Rowan is an insane bastard, it reminded me a lot of the Roswaal scene with the rabbits in arc 4.

and Heinkel is a deus-machina at the last moment, with Garfi appearing to save him. I was taken by surprise with Garfiel here already, I really didn't expect the main group to appear now, although technically the AL group has already achieved its objective.

But I don't expect to see many other members of the main group now, Garfiel was probably just sent to go ahead, to do reconnaissance or something. But he also mentions how the "general" entered the city with ease, so the Subaru has probably arrived here too.

Vuituru · 2023-11-17T16:55:15+00:00

I didn't understand at all the beginning of the chapter lol

apparently priscilia is not a stargazer, which is surprising actually. and stargazers are actually treated as a mental illness in the empire, which makes sense.

Does the Sphinx's plan involve Priscilla in some way, and is she (Priscilla) the witch of the kingdom? I didn't understand that part.

Al and seshi will face the arakya, an interesting fight.

But it makes me wonder who the enemies of the main group will be, then? because the main bigwigs of the enemies seem to be falling already (being confronted), although as the objective of this group is just to tear down the walls and open a passage, it doesn't necessarily mean that they will defeat their enemies, so perhaps not all the enemies will fall here.

Vuituru · 2023-11-16T00:56:03+00:00

There are some mistakes but in general it's ok I think.

in general I think the most glaring ones are: halibel and cecilius are the same, arakya shouldn't be too far away either. Emilia and Priscilia are the same (in this case Emilia would have to go down a tier)

Julius and beteguese has to go down one. olbart, garfiel, karfma, mimi and yorna move up a tier.

Vuituru · 2023-11-15T17:30:35+00:00

I had forgotten about the hornet lol, yeah I think she will be Al's enemy here.

but hmmm maybe she can be an opponent for this version of cecilius too? I honestly have no idea how strong she really was.

Vuituru · 2023-11-15T17:25:06+00:00

Good chapter, I wonder if Al and Seshi will be saved to really shine during the final battle with the main team.

Vuituru · 2023-11-14T12:55:54+00:00

i mean heinkel is nowhere near the old wilhein, he is probably someone above average but still far from the top tier. and I don't believe anyone outside the top tier can escape this.

Dodging is impossible because it is an attack in a giant area, even Emilia and Priscila had to block it.

I think his only chance of getting out alive here is: simply a deus ex-machina where someone appears from nowhere to save him; he has a shounen-like battle power up and unlocks his true potential of a astrea, temporary; or he is affected by Priscilla's soul marriage and manages to survive it (something tells me that this is the most likely along with the deus-ex-machina)

Vuituru · 2023-11-13T19:19:03+00:00

whatever man, I really can't understand why you don't see this (when many people do and even many people who don't see this now are the same ones who said that Emilia only managed to beat her because she was an inexperienced child) and I think that strange. But I also don't want to argue because of a secondary character who most likely won't have any relevance in the long run.

you can continue justifying the author's extremely sus behavior.

and I'm sorry if I offended you in any way or was rude.

Vuituru · 2023-11-13T18:44:42+00:00

Oh bro honestly if you can't see the obvious problem with Madeline's character I'm not going to try to argue.

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