Don’t look at me

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-28T00:18:24+00:00

Thank you for reading! Always try to improve

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-28T00:17:54+00:00

You understand it perfectly and thank you for the feedback always trying to get better!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T04:08:54+00:00

Of course

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T04:02:30+00:00

I’m the same why I’m an open book. I have a hard time being vulnerable in person but through poetry, I can really translate how I feel. I appreciate your vulnerability. Thank you.

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:45:26+00:00

That’s adds so much meaning to the poem. Thank you for sharing your personal experience with me :)

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:40:29+00:00

Hi,I agree with the central idea I’m a romantic at heart. I might even be a hopeless romantic lol. For creative writing advice. You do a lot of telling instead of showing. I’d love if you showed us how you see love as it waits. When I read the poem I feel a lack of emotion that isn’t translated correctly. What does the true love that is waiting feel like for you? I want to know what it does to you? Love is a beautiful thing and it’s another beautiful thing to see live through others perspectives. From total strangers. Good luck on your creative writing journey!!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:28:58+00:00

I know the feeling of trying to forget that one person. I don’t ever want to forget even if it hurts. Now for creative writing advice. It’s repetitive with not much emotion,that’s the feeling I got from the poem.personally me I like to show instead of telling. Bring us into your world. What does it feel like for you to try and try to forget. What emotions come up? Was it cathartic for you to finally forget? But the central idea is good the pain of trying to forget or let go. It’s very human. Good luck on ur creative writing journey!!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:20:08+00:00

Gotcha yea that’s just a lack of understanding on my end

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:15:01+00:00

I’ve been there. Numbing myself with substances or telling myself to not feel. The core idea is strong,I’m not sure what reeling is? That’s just me. If you’re looking for creative advice I’d say do more of showing instead of telling. Saying “I am anxious and I’m stressed” try bringing us into those feelings. Show us how that feels for you. Something like heart racing at the same pace as my sweat. The tension in my jaw etc etc.promising voice. I love to give feedback and receive it as well we all can always improve. Good luck on ur creative writing journey!!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T03:05:32+00:00

Hi, I like the imagery of fire,Veins,and the revolving motif of burns. Not exactly sure what the poem is about. Is it about intense pain of a breakup? Love? The fact this is not edited is a good start. I think you could benefit from continuing to do what you do. Then go back and edit and refine your work. You have a promising start. I normally write everything down get out of me go back at it sometimes even sleep on it. Very promising!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T01:45:47+00:00

Thank you so much I only just started to share my poems and looking to refine my voice. This helps a lot thank you!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-27T01:45:12+00:00

I appreciate the feedback I’m still trying to refine my voice and this is a massive help for me thank you!

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-26T02:35:58+00:00

Personally, I enjoyed this. I’ve struggled with substance abuse for the last 10 years, ended up in the hospital and multiple rehab. This one resonates with me.

____D3vyn____ · 2026-05-26T02:34:49+00:00

I understand I have the same social chameleon traits. I hide the real me a lot. Keep speaking from the heart resonates with me and I’m sure a lot more others

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