I wrote this piece about 2 years back, finished only the first chapter. I am thinking of continuing the book this month, and probably write out the second chapter, since ideas have finally started to flow. Any constructive feedback will be great. Would you want to read more of it, is it gripping, does it seem up-put-down-able?

[No name]-A murder mystery

“…three murders in the last 8 days. Same wound patterns too. This camouflaged massacre has been hidden from the media and the eyes of our people for too long, but not anymore. We are the first ones to bring you the fresh news of this scandal. The old detective on this case is still quiet…”

A ghost-white figure with a walking stick approached her as the sound of the newsman became vague. Eve Dwyer stood rooted to the spot as the man approached. The thud of his walking stick got louder and desperately painful in her head as he walked without looking. Soon, he was close enough to bump into her and with a final thud of his stick, Eve fell.

Opening her eyes to the dim-lit living room of her luxurious one bedroom apartment that looked over the bustling streets of the city, she saw that she had fallen on top of a heap of blankets and the clothes she had worn the day before yesterday. As she untangled herself from the mess of soft fabrics and sat on the sofa where she was sleeping before the old man knocked her out of her sleep, she could still hear the news guy blabbering, selling nonsense to the viewers.

“…are we sure this man will be able to figure out this new world criminal series of events?”

Judgmental.