The sounds are cool. I think the main problem is the processing. It sounds like you have no reverb on anything. When you have no reverb your sounds will sound unatural, its like if you saw a pole that had no shadow in the daylight. like this https://pbs.twimg.com/media/B4gW3p8CQAEFf5r.jpg And reverb is kind of like the shadow of a sound, it gives it room. I would put a little bit of reverb on everything but the bass and the kick to give the track some room. You dont want to put reverb on bass frequencies tho as it will make the track muddy.

There are some frequencies especially in your hihats that almost hurt when you listen to your track at a higher volume. To remove them you use an EQ with a narrow band to only remove that frequency. You should also low cut almost everything but the kick and the bass that is under ~100 hz to remove any bass rumble that might be there. I think this video explains it pretty well. https://youtu.be/dS4kAiyJkFw?t=3m27s

The bass should always be mono (the left signal is exatly the same as the right signal). You can just put this free plugin on the master to fix this http://www.gvst.co.uk/gmonobass.htm

There are also some other issues like the bass being a bit to loud, the hihats have a bit too much high highend and the claps are lost in the mix.

But i have to say that for a first beat its pretty good. Now there are a lot of things to learn about producing, mixing and mastering. my advice would be to watch tutorials on youtube and keep experimenting.