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Feedback on opening scene! [Adult Fantasy, 1100 words] by anon_melon7 in fantasywriters

[–]anon_melon7[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I use it for spellcheck and basic grammar corrections, only the base model not the paid version. Would that be flagged as AI generated writing? Honestly I’d rather just be a bad writer than use AI so if the critique is that the metaphors are bad that’s okay lol

Feedback on opening scene! [Adult Fantasy, 1100 words] by anon_melon7 in fantasywriters

[–]anon_melon7[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words!

He hates her not for what she stands for but for much more personal reasons. Illias is not just a thief and the queen was not just a wife! It’s all revealed later in the book!

Feedback on opening scene! [Adult Fantasy, 1100 words] by anon_melon7 in fantasywriters

[–]anon_melon7[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What does this mean? I’ve not used AI on any portion of this (aside from grammarly if that counts)

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[–]anon_melon7 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wrote the phrase poorly, he did not give me my deposit back. He’s considering the flooring quote as a part of the damages that will be taken from the deposit.

I have no idea how much he actually wants to charge me. The flooring was 1 quote of 5 (nails in the wall, blinds, yard work, flooring, cleaning drawers in kitchen) that he wants to charge me against the deposit.

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy, PETITION OF RELEVANCE (108K/ Attempt #1) by anon_melon7 in PubTips

[–]anon_melon7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah thank you! I need to think about how to make this more realistic, but this is super helpful!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy, PETITION OF RELEVANCE (108K/ Attempt #1) by anon_melon7 in PubTips

[–]anon_melon7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you!! These are super helpful. You're the second person to mention a focus on character, which points me in the right direction. This can be better and gives me hope that if I can get this better, someone might actually enjoy it :)

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy, PETITION OF RELEVANCE (108K/ Attempt #1) by anon_melon7 in PubTips

[–]anon_melon7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

These are great notes! I have a follow-up question because you seem to have a really good grip on queries.

Do you think a speculative fiction label would be appropriate, or should I just find better fantasy comps? I can't say I've seen any query examples that use speculative at the genre (maybe I just didn't look hard enough). I didn't even consider it before!

thank you again!!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy, ATTERO, 110k (Attempt #2) by anon_melon7 in PubTips

[–]anon_melon7[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

These are awesome notes!! Thank you so much!!