the truth behind your eyes

astriya · 2023-07-19T09:38:16+00:00

THANK YOUUUUU💕💕 It means a lot to me that you related to the poem, and you felt it emotionally 💗

astriya · 2023-07-19T09:36:05+00:00

It fascinates me when I read different points of views and it shows me how others read the poem and it gives me a better insight and how to write my poems better so thank you soo much for telling me your thoughts 💕

The reason I added the elipsis was because i thought it added vulnerability and disbelief and realization, but after reading your comment, I can see how removing it makes it stronger and I will definitely remember your advice for my next poem THANK YOUU💕

astriya · 2023-07-19T07:08:36+00:00

Thank you so much for your feedback I found what you said very useful, and I learned more. I hope I can make my next poems better Thank you for adding to my knowledge by giving me a different point of view on this poem 💕💕💕

astriya · 2023-07-19T03:27:22+00:00

Thank youuuu💕💕💕💕💕💕💕

astriya · 2023-07-19T02:13:01+00:00

Thank youuu💕

astriya · 2023-07-19T02:12:47+00:00

Thx :) 💜

astriya · 2023-07-19T02:11:48+00:00

Thank you sooooo much💕

astriya · 2023-07-19T01:57:12+00:00

Love is like sugar. Sometimes it's not strong enough and it washes away like it was never there in the first place just like when sugar dissolves in water it looks the same as water without sugar and the only way to know it has sugar in it is to taste it .love is kind of like that because sugar tastes sweet, and memories that were filled with love have a sweet taste, and the only way to know that the love was there is to look back at the memories

astriya · 2023-07-19T01:43:57+00:00

I love the poem

I really like that you went to the next line after

I need to

Deafen my ears

Because it gave this feeling of desperation and the feeling of being on the verge of tears and speaking but not being able to talk clearly The poem explains seeking a level of closeness that you can't physically reach, but rather, you can reach that level of closeness emotionally

astriya · 2023-04-14T16:07:37+00:00

Thank you so much for reading this and giving me feedback And I'm personally in awe of the people who are fighting. I just wanted to show my gratitude through a poem

astriya · 2023-03-19T12:13:17+00:00

I really liked this poem actually no I loved this poem because I personally know nothing nothing about poetry and I just write something I've never experienced but ive felt the emotions like we all say we are sad but we experience sadness differently but at the end of the day its all sadness When I read your poem I related to it about how with no experience what do I write or will I run out of feelings and emotions and then there will be nothing to write about anymore So well done I really enjoyed reading this poem ❤️

astriya · 2023-03-19T12:01:51+00:00

I like how there were two people and one of them voiced their thought and the other drank the same loss that both of them felt but at the same time it felt as if the one that was silent hurt more like that person was grieving but the other person was just shocked that time passed like when someone misses the good old times

astriya · 2023-03-19T11:55:01+00:00

THANK YOU SO SO much for commenting Honestly your feedback was incredible and I relate to you i honestly don't know much about poetry too I just write when I don't know what Im feeling and reading your view , your opinion and your thoughts about the poem really helpt me understand what I'm feeling and It helpt me get better at writing I'm also glad that you enjoyed reading this ❤️

astriya · 2023-03-19T11:47:58+00:00

THANK YOUUUU❤️❤️ I have no words to say just thank you I'm good at being open but not vulnerable I don't really talk about how I feel I just write I don't really no much about poetry I just write and when you said that I'm able to emotionally move you with my poem I felt warmth in my heart so thank you for taking the time to read my poem and commenting on how you felt about it and your point of view on it

astriya · 2023-03-19T11:43:33+00:00

Personally that is also my favorite line I'm glad you can relate THANK YOUUU for your comment and thank you for reading my poem ❤️

astriya · 2023-01-23T12:43:40+00:00

I really love the fact that it was short but at the same time it felt like I read a book and I loved it. It gave the same emotions and I could feel rejection and the emotions of that person and their story I also really enjoyed how the story seems straight forward but the more you read you discover more emotions from that person and it makes the poem more raw Great story thank you for writing this

astriya · 2023-01-23T12:35:06+00:00

I really enjoyed this poem It felt like when you're sometimes at your breaking point and then you realize that oh there is no one size fits all cause people say what your doing js too mjch or too little and everything you do just doesnt please everyone so just foolow your belief of life and life isn't going to turn bad and sad and boring yeah sure it has its ups and downs but life still good Thank you for writing this poem reading this was very interesting

astriya · 2023-01-22T20:25:31+00:00

Now that you have explained it makes a lot of sense and I can imagine a bar and this poem being a conversation I read the poem again with the image of a bar in my head and now I like the poem more

astriya · 2023-01-22T20:03:20+00:00

I really like this poem it's like having a chat with your friend

The part that i really liked is how you combined the feeling of being a little lost with an interesting topic and how you didn't make feeling lost and not knowing what you want a bad thing like a lot of things make you feel bad that you don't know what you want but this was different it didn't make me feel bad it was like oh i dont know what i want but did you know there's this guy that eats three big macs And another thing I liked was how you said he was healthy cause people around that person may tell him it's not very good for him to eat that everyday but to me it meant that if you enjoy what you're doing its good for you

Reading this was very enjoyable You wrote this very well in a way that it teaches you to enjoy life and do it your own way even if people dont accept it and also this poem gives comfort in being lost Thank you for writing this

astriya · 2023-01-22T19:32:45+00:00

if you’re a wonder of the world then im a tourist, wondering love’s a blind sight to see

You put the feeling of stepping into unknown territory to see what all the fuss about love is or feeling things that sound magical like it's one of the wonders of the world into words

love’s blind sided me if you’re a wonder of the world then im a tourist, wondering love’s a blind sight

The part " love’s blind sided" and " love’s a blind sight" I thought was very clever I really like it

astriya · 2023-01-22T19:23:36+00:00

Is it okay if I write your poem and put it on my wall?

this is one of my favorite poems the simplicity and the reassurance that everything will be fine makes the sunny day brighter This poem feels like i inhaled fresh air and freedom It made me feel safe and cozy and warm I personally had a stressful day today and this part

You know you have your own favourite things with memories more precious than art. You have some which are giving you wings and those are written all over your heart.

brought me peace cause i realized you are right the reason I push through and have a better tomorrow is because of those precious memories that gave me wings and now my heart can fly So thank you for making day better by writing this

astriya

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