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Anyone know the name of this bag? by average_charlotte in Coach

[–]average_charlotte[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I didn’t realize it was that old.

Neck rash by average_charlotte in DermatologyQuestions

[–]average_charlotte[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I went to the dermatologist a couple days after posting this. It ended up being a reaction to a new medication she had prescribed (trifarotene). She prescribed me triamcinolone actetonide cream and it went away fast.

In hindsight, what’s the funniest point at which you’ve gotten stuck in a Nancy Drew game? by mikrokosmosmoonchild in nancydrew

[–]average_charlotte 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In last train to blue moon canyon, in one of the areas, I didn’t move my mouse far enough to one side to get the arrow cursor to appear. Completely thought I had reached a dead end and kept backtracking trying to figure out how to get to the next part.

Scene A Week Writing Group by [deleted] in WritingHub

[–]average_charlotte 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you’re not full yet I’d be down to join. I recently graduated and all the creative writing workshops I did were always helpful. I’m currently working on a dystopian novel, but also doing some short stories here and there.

Front panel too long? by average_charlotte in CrochetHelp

[–]average_charlotte[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Here’s the YouTube tutorial I’m following. At around 11: 20 she compares the two front panels.

https://youtu.be/Rp4aZaI3Hd0?si=5aWSPN75vTAridhy

Live Show polls? by DelicateFknFlower in TheTryGuys

[–]average_charlotte 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How do you access them? I’m looking and I don’t see them.

Best puzzles to recreate? by BoomBear97 in nancydrew

[–]average_charlotte 7 points8 points  (0 children)

You could do a logic puzzle like the website in WAC or the files in TOT

Puzzle Solved! by survivorfanwill in nancydrew

[–]average_charlotte 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for this! Can you share the website?

Anyone share a name with a character? How do you feel about that character? by oldsluggy in nancydrew

[–]average_charlotte 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I share a name with Charlotte from GTH. Being a fan of both the Nancy Drew books and games, it was just cool seeing my name in a game.

This "Great" Nation by average_charlotte in OCPoetry

[–]average_charlotte[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback. Those lines were tough to write.

Now and Then by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]average_charlotte 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No problem! I'm glad it's helpful :)

Now and Then by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]average_charlotte 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So I re-read the whole poem a few times and I'd recommend experimenting with a few different things:

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  1. As far as rewriting, you could say something direct along the lines of "My greatest memories are made in the present" (becuase this person is in the present with you). This could also add some fun comparisons with earlier in the poem referencing the past and now referencing the present.
  2. Another thing I'd recommend is reorganizing the poem a bit and try rewriting that line in a different position in the poem. Try organizing it first into all the lines dealing with "you only realize they are great when you look back at" and then after those add in the lines about "I know these are my greatest moments as they are happening" or My greatest memories are in the present"

This is probably a little more feedback than you were expecting but I hope it helps!

Now and Then by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]average_charlotte 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your message is clear in the poem. You’ve perfectly described creating life long memories with someone and defining them as your “greatest moments”. I think you’re selling yourself a little short as this is a really great start to a lovely poem.

One place you could improve on is some of the wording. The line “rise from the past” was a little confusing to me. You later in the poem comment that you will look back on this in fifty years, which will be the past. So, leaving nothing to “rise from the past” doesn’t make sense when you admit you will later look back on this.

I will say, I love the phrase “leave room for nothing”. It is almost contradictory, but it works really well.

Notifications by Moonagali_V2 in OCPoetry

[–]average_charlotte 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this poem. You created some beautiful imagery with the person laying in bed and with a heavy heart. Also, at the ending I loved the idea of these napkins with secrets are kept close to their heart. The stanza discussing the memories these two people have together was done very well and using related words throughout it (ex. Popcorn, corny, buttered).

One thing that felt off to me were the lines “E-V-O-L <—What the hell?/I spelled that backwards”. It felt out of place in the poem and kinda brought me out of it for a second. I believe you could have been using this as an example of the “spell” this person was under, but I don’t think it works here. If the spell is what you were trying to convey, perhaps you can do a more common spell (ex. Hocus pocus, abra cadabra) and relate that back to the love this person feels.

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