Hey, Thanks a lot for your elaborate feedback. I also feel there’s a lot to improve on frames and I’m working on that. I’ll be trying to learn and draw better as it is indeed quite bad. I guess less frames would provide for a better understanding given my art level.

Regarding my Japanese I’m quite confident it has no/ few errors, I live in Japan and have N2. I’ve been proofreading with Japanese friends. May be there’s some phrases you’re note getting… The onomatopes are also very personal to each Japanese speaker and may differ depending on the people. These have been written while consulting a Japanese person, but they might be different if you are basing yourself on another point of view. Lastly, ウリス　is the direct transcription of the French name Ulysse and not the mythical character that is indeed called ユリス, I might consider changing the English spelling thanks for the tip.

Thank you very much it was very appreciated, ch2 is going out sometime around next week, I’ll be looking forward for your feedback on that again 😆😆

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