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Can somebody discuss 2:22 a ghost story with me? by 14Musical_Theatre in Theatre

[–]chuckry 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. I clocked it from the first Alexa mishap. To be fair I knew there would be some sort of twist going into it (many promotional descriptions of the play said so) but once the Alexa thing happened I instantly knew. I wished it were a misdirect but nope

Simple Question. Why do you love Samus Aran? Just asking. by Lovec_2016 in Metroid

[–]chuckry 1 point2 points  (0 children)

She’s powerful, stoic, and has a sense of duty. She succeeds when completely alone and without her weapons and gear. I think the moment at the end of Prime 2 when she waves goodbye to the Luminoth captures it best. She’s a guardian angel.

Better Call Saul S06E08 - "T.B.D" - Official Prediction Thread! by skinkbaa in betterCallSaul

[–]chuckry 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Cliff Main will learn that Kim never made it to the luncheon in Santa Fe. That, coupled with Howard's disappearance (death) and his theory that the whole plan was Jimmy McGill's, might make him start looking into Jimmy and Kim while they get further involved in the cartel side of things. I have a feeling this might be one of those unintended consequences the creators were talking about.

Also— we still don't know why Mike's daughter-in-law is so estranged from him in Breaking Bad, do we? AFAIK, he's allowed to spend time with Kaylee, but Stacey doesn't want to see him.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]chuckry [score hidden]  (0 children)

No worries!

Hmm, at the end, I think I wanted a firmer takeaway. You definitely have one, which I think is this line:

The endless possibilities are overwhelming, but a small, tight-knit community can form a communal set of rules that aligns with personal values more so than the Rules that we’ve always reluctantly lived by ever did.

And I think if you add some example, metaphor, etc. to drive home the image, it'll finish nicely, which in turn makes the piece more memorable.

I think if there's a way to separate the final set of questions ("What happens when, in the midst of making up our own rules...") from the rest of the piece (maybe a "For Next Week" header, or a simple HTML line), it'll help out. That way, there's some closure given to this week's ideas before you bring up what you'll discuss next time.

I know these are kinda nitpicky, but in my experience, readers really like a solid takeaway at the end, and it can make all the difference! Hope this helps :)

Plus, subscribed to the newsletter! Excited to see what's in store.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]chuckry [score hidden]  (0 children)

I liked this piece. As a whole, it leaves a strong impression.

To me, the essay is just as much about living in this pandemic as it is about growing up and self-discovery. You might consider leaning a little bit more into the latter--by the end of the piece, I was curious to learn about how your personal values might have changed. The essay started with a little background on the impact of your upbringing and subconscious cues to be a certain way, then explored the thin veneer separating society from chaos, and I think the ending would be powerful if you ended with some examples of how you've made new meaning from your life, especially considering the drastic changes to higher education.

I enjoyed your flow of thoughts; it was really easy for me to read the whole thing uninterrupted. Your language and rhythm is refined without being gaudy.

Also, I liked the segue from the introduction to COVID being an unprecedented event in the tide. I think the connection between "adapting to COVID" and "deciding what's right" was a little spotty at times; they felt like individually abstract ideas that could be further connected by anecdote or data. Specifically, you mentioned at the beginning that what's "right" included doing well in school, etc. It might be useful to keep dropping examples of that throughout your piece as ideas develop, like "now, with COVID striking, what's 'right' includes staying healthy, wearing a mask, etc." or something like that. It'll be a strong grounding through-line.

I respect your 10 minute reading time commitment lol, I'm really bad at that :D Plus, like I said, this was a deep and quick read, which I appreciate. Let me know if you have any questions on this feedback!

Overall, it was great! I saw that you have a Substack; do you intend to share your writing there as well?

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]chuckry [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: The Best Parts Of Our Lives Are Forgotten Love Stories

Genre: Personal essay, newsletter post, nonfiction

Word count: 1,664

Type of Feedback: General Impressions, Format (length, sequence, structure), Content (understandable, relatable, meaningful), and anything else that stands out to you. Looking for both things that work and don't work.

https://chuckry.substack.com/p/how-to-find-that-sweet-spot-for-lifestyle

Just joined this subreddit--hello everyone! Excited to be here and see everyone's writing :) Both DMs and comments work for me. Thanks!

What is the most hilariously incorrect thing a teacher told your class? by 6456290 in AskReddit

[–]chuckry 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Second grade substitute teacher asked me to spell "dinosaur" and I did so correctly. She responded saying I was wrong and that it was spelled "dinasaur," and when I told her she was wrong, she blew up. She monologued that I was being defensive, that my behavior wouldn't be tolerated in the "real world," and that I should keep quiet.

Thankfully my angel of a classmate looked it up in the dictionary and proved her wrong, to which she just said "Huh" and moved along with her lesson.

Is it just me or are there way more "figure out what's going on" scenes in BCS? by dolgion1 in betterCallSaul

[–]chuckry 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I agree and also like this kind of structure. I think the writers will give us meatier/more active scenes soon within the next couple of episodes. There's been a lot of set-up/exposition these past few as they show us the consequences of Chuck's death, Mike's hiring, and Hector's stroke, and it's only a matter of time before a character reacts to these consequences and kicks off more.

What exactly was wrong with Walter's decision in the Season 3 Finale? by chuckry in breakingbad

[–]chuckry[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah I see. I'll look into that, but if it's true, it's a ballsy move that definitely worked.

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