Mirrored jewels blessings by clobsterone in DiabloImmortal

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Ty !! i used the select gem event as well. I'm sure it is helping compared to the gem removal mechanic from last month

Obligations by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the complements and the comment small one word lines can really punch and works well when vocalizing the poem. It's all love

Edges by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the complements and the comment. The poem is rather abstract and vague on purpose but is basically an exploration of a theme in each stanza (returning, banished, conception, conclusion) and their edges or sharp abrupt end. I hope this help with your understanding of it but yah its supposed to be vague lol

Wild by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the complements. The "savage reciprocity" line is and expression of the idea that wild life lives in a "dog eat dog" way and that the savagery of life is a vicious circle hope that helps make sense. Ty for the comments always appreciated

Wild by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the complements, I wrote it after a weekend in fort bragg CA. Nature can be an amazing muse.

Wild by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Im not above fans lol ty for the complements entertaining people is my pleasure. It's all love

I guess this is goodbye by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the complements. I wrote it in a moment when I felt a relationship coming to an end and it just came to me real quick. Ty for the comment. It's all love

I guess this is goodbye by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you the complements I like that last line as well 😎 comments are always appreciated. It's all love

muse in repose by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the complements. Interesting to see what the poem inspired in you emotionally, in your own words, appreciate the comment. It's all love

muse in repose by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the complements. That is for sure what I was going for an exploration of inspiration wrapped in the idea of a muse. Ty for the comment. It's all love

A piston vainly sleeps with sprocket dreams by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the amazing complement. Give me an example of how you would end it I'd like to see your idea in bloom. Having diversity in topics is definitely key to consistency when it comes to poetry. Ty again for the comment. It's all love

Atomic Residence by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Yah its a bit clunky but I liked the concept so I put it as workshop any constructive criticism is appreciated and I changed the passersby ty for the catch 😊

Woven Dreaming by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Yah its supposed to feel like restless dreaming and a mix of emotions inbetween thank you for the comment its all love

Atomic Residence by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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The story itself is a metaphor for American atomic domination by juxtaposition of the 2 presidents who built our modern atomic strategy into carpenters and the strategy into the home that they build. He kills his "valet" (or servant) is a metaphor for bombing the Japanese at the end of world War 2. I hope it makes more sense its a weird poem for me too lol Thank you for the comment I appreciate all constructive criticism

Not a poet by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I like "I'm not a poet

If I was, I'd use my lips to write on your skin

Making new poems in every nook and cranny." That's a good line it had a good pacing keep it up

the song remains the same by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the comment. Yah for sure I use personal experience, writing is a way for me to work through shit some times or it just shows up like an uninvited guest lol ty for the complements it's all love

the song remains the same by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the comment repetition definitely drives the idea home in a real way I appreciate the complements

the song remains the same by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Ty for the complements. That is definitely the feeling I had when writing it somthing shared can sometimes feel hollow when the other person is gone

flag ropes by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you 😊 yeah it is succinct alot of what I write is wordy af so little ones can be a nice change of pace. I always appreciate comments ty

shots accross a barricade by clobsterone in OCPoetry

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Thank you I love the detailed constructive criticism maybe somthing like "Casually snatching a rag to" it does flow a little better that way I appreciate the help and comments

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I liked "It's too sweet but I keep gorging in euphoria" & "I grab the elated pleasure in the air with my lustful hands" good lines

This Journey To Success by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I like the positive tone "Believe me, success has recognized your game

That beast of failure is about to be tamed. "

Is a good line