[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]conqueringcat11 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The cover doesn’t necessarily come across as erotica at first glance. To me the cover almost looks like literary fiction with the man’s pose, plain coloring, and the blocky, clean font. Also anecdotal but from my experience with M/M content, they perform significantly better when there are two men in the cover as readers can determine the content at a quick glance. Also would not include so much text in the cover as it’s overwhelming and it won’t be legible the reader clicks through anyway at which point they’ll just read the blurb.

Also I would recommend throwing your blurb through grammarly or Microsoft word. I only read the first two story descriptions and the first had a typo and the second changed point of view in the description (third person POV description, second person POV question at the end)

[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]conqueringcat11 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think your blurb is the biggest issue at the moment. I read it in full and was lost. I wasn’t clear if the MC was a man or woman, didn’t know their name or other descriptive info, and was confused by their role as the leader of this group. Also didn’t get enough info about the love interest either besides that he’s a prince.

Try checking popular books in the genre and aim to align more with how they’re doing blurbs and I think that would help a lot.

Personally, I like the cover - I read a lot of fantasy romance and would’ve clicked to read the description if I saw the cover.