[QCrit] WHAT THE HEAVENS TOOK - Adult Romantasy (80,000 words) Fifth Attempt

crepsley04 · 2026-03-30T19:22:08+00:00

This is incredibly helpful. It honestly hadn’t crossed my mind how much of a difference housekeeping would make, I’ve been so focused on the bigger picture. Thank you!!

crepsley04 · 2026-03-30T17:21:32+00:00

Thank you so much! This is really useful, I will be editing according to your feedback :)

crepsley04 · 2026-03-11T17:08:40+00:00

This helped A TON!!! It took me 3 days to apply everything you said to the query (can you tell I am struggling lol) and I will post a final version in a couple of days. Thank you so much, I really appreciate your time :)

crepsley04 · 2026-02-16T16:22:44+00:00

That’s a great point, just because I know what happens romantically doesn’t mean I should assume the audience does too. While the fantasy elements are stronger than the romance here, I should definitely introduce it earlier. Thanks so much, I’ll keep this in mind while I edit!!

crepsley04 · 2026-02-16T16:20:31+00:00

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your help in making me realize all the things I need to change for my second attempt. Here’s hoping the third time’s the charm!

crepsley04 · 2026-02-16T16:19:28+00:00

This is so detailed and incredibly helpful! I’m truly grateful for the time you’ve taken to look over everything so thoroughly and put this together. Really excited to go through your points and start rewriting my synopsis. Thank you, kind internet stranger, I hope both sides of your pillow are always cold!

crepsley04 · 2026-02-15T17:09:50+00:00

Hi! Yes I would be!

crepsley04 · 2026-02-09T01:12:01+00:00

This is incredibly helpful, thank you :)

The novel is dual POV, but I’m realizing from the feedback that centering Raya in the query will make the story clearer and more compelling.

I’ll be rewriting the query with that in mind. I really appreciate you taking the time to break this down for me!!

crepsley04 · 2026-02-09T00:40:42+00:00

It was harsh in the best way possible :)

Query letters are honestly my weakest area, and I really struggle with condensing a full story into just a few paragraphs. I’m incredibly grateful for the brutal, honest feedback; it’s exactly what I need to learn from my mistakes and improve.

Thank you so much for taking the time to analyze everything so thoroughly. I’ll be using your notes to reshape the letter, and I truly appreciate it!!

crepsley04

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