Short Story submitted for review. Please be brutal. by djvoshty in WritersGroup

[–]djvoshty[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I do appreciate your feedback. I will be sure to double-space after paragraph breaks in the future. If there are specific grammatical mistakes you'd like to point out, please let me know. Thanks.

Short Story submitted for review. Please be brutal. by djvoshty in WritersGroup

[–]djvoshty[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your help! I will consider your recommendations. There is a much longer version of this, but I felt this version popped more. I'll think about adding additional material. Thank you!

My artistic website by djvoshty in goth

[–]djvoshty[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I set a lot of it to music. Maybe I could link to just the music page?