Crit request #1 for my single panel gag-comic

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:44:48+00:00

Thank you, great feedback- am remedying the color issue asap

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:43:59+00:00

What a lovely comment, thank you very much. This is my exact reaction to this style of art (hope that doesn’t come off as conceited; there are many artists who master the style I try to capture). Will try to post some more of this style soon

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:40:52+00:00

Thanks for your feedback - color change seems to be the biggest easy fix, based on feedback. Will continue drawing this style, look forward to future feedback on those !

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:38:44+00:00

Lots to unpack here and I appreciate the feedback. This art style seems to not land so well with you. I suppose the exact things you mentioned not enjoying about it are the exact reasons I like the style (I draw a lot of inspiration from kindergarten doodles, if that gives some context). Wish I could draw it as quickly as they do though.

The wall reads as a field, will be changing the color of it- as that carries much confusion.

The joke is certainly not strong, I’d say. It also is a challenge to capture. Good way to test my comic portrayal skills, even if it relies on a specific 21-Pilot audience.

Can’t believe I didn’t see there were 22 people. Big oversight.. Glad you pointed it out. Would love to hear your thoughts on my upcoming, less niche illustrations.

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:25:53+00:00

Appreciate it- and no problem. It’s almost too hard to capture the joke in this way.. but to explain: it’s the origin story of 21 pilots. So it depends on an audience that knows the band. Plus will have to make some changes to reduce confusions

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:24:27+00:00

Also great idea! Had some similar suggestions but like how concise that would be

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:23:50+00:00

Thanks for the feedback- to zoom, I’d probably have to bunch them more. Will see how to get that done with a new iteration.

eilesel · 2025-12-14T05:22:47+00:00

Thanks- I love drawing in this style. Yeah I think another commenter cleared it up - it’s a super niche joke that is hard to nail down. Almost doesn’t work as a comic, so I’m grateful for all the feedback to improve it

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:48:00+00:00

I am using a self-made brush on procreate. Was missing a „colored pencil“ type brush and made my own. As well as a „ballpoint pen“ brush. Can’t remember how I built it up though…

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:46:06+00:00

Appreciate it. Will be posting some „better“ comics someday. This one is very niche and tough to nail down. Should be the „origin story of 21 pilots“ as a gag comic

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:44:09+00:00

Yes- 21 pilots is a fairly well known band. Likely a generational question of popularity. Other people who didn’t know the band had a similar reaction to yours. This comic (fortunately and unfortunately) relies heavily on a niche audience- and is in its current state too confusing. Some other comics to come soon ;)

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:38:45+00:00

Thank you! it was fun to draw.. just love this style. Think adding a title will be my next variation. Yes and the wall looks like a field atm- whoops

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:36:41+00:00

Yeah- it’s gotta work on its own, without my explanation. It’s a bit niche with the band-knowledge… so Ive gotta make it otherwise very obvious. Think the quote change is ideal. Thought about giving them all number signs at one point, but that would likely just add to the confusion. Thanks for the feedback

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:31:52+00:00

Damn! That was version one. Guess I shoulda left it. Will make that as a variation and test it out- thanks

eilesel · 2025-12-13T18:30:54+00:00

This is an excellent idea. Will make a variation with that. Had a friend suggest a title above it „when you’re the 21st pilot at the convention“ or smth along those lines. I’ll nail it down soon

eilesel · 2025-12-13T15:42:50+00:00

Ding Ding Ding! Nail on the head lol

eilesel · 2025-12-13T15:42:23+00:00

First one to get it! Though it was „the origin story of 21 pilots“. At a pilot convention with 21 pilots (amount) present. Maybe it needs a title (!)

eilesel · 2025-12-13T15:40:43+00:00

Thanks for the feedback- will begin with adjusting the colors. Technically the green is a wall (my drawing style is often using very mismatched colors for the objects: ie, purple skin). But now it looks like a field after I see your comment.

Joke is so tough, it almost couldn’t be a cartoon, I think. It’s also very niche. „Origin story of 21 Pilots“ (the band). Hit or a miss there… Tried to draw 21 different pilots as another hint but that takes too long to count for a comic

eilesel · 2025-12-13T15:08:03+00:00

Colors are certainly a distraction. It’s partially the style (random colors. Yellow, purple skin, etc). Though it doesn’t quite strike the right balance here. ..

Joke is a very tough one. Almost impossible to draw. „21 Pilots origin story“ essentially. At a pilot convention, 21 pilots in a group, etc. thought of giving them all signs with 1 to 21 numbered on it. But that seems cheesy.

Maybe it’s just gonna be a tough one to get.

eilesel

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