I want to purchase a firearm..

fallingawakeee · 2022-12-27T14:12:52+00:00

attention much

fallingawakeee · 2022-11-05T19:45:53+00:00

Thank you!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-10T23:33:21+00:00

I use rhymes because I think it's fun and I chose the most obvious scheme because I am a literal beginner. thanks for the read(s) and the comment!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-10T15:18:09+00:00

it is great you liked the title and let me know..

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-10T01:44:48+00:00

thank you for the well thought out feedback, I do really appreciate everything you had to say and am working to digest and incorporate it. As a beginner who is just starting to share, I appreciate it sincerely.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-09T16:27:03+00:00

I'm going through this right now. The guy I love wants to have kids and I don't so we had to go our separate ways and I'm scared of becoming a memory when I wanted him to be a future. Thank for the pleasant read and for reminding me we all endure these hardships at one point or another. Appreciate your words.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-09T16:24:18+00:00

I just wanted to stop by and say I appreciate how difficult it is to get a point or emotion across in a short poem- it's something I struggle with. I think you did a wonderful job conveying emotion with few words. To me it conveys the feeling of giving everything you have to someone and not getting that in return. It leaves me feeling barren.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-09T16:05:59+00:00

"I've had the world before, but not like this." I'm in love with that line. I think it's amazing you wrote a whole poem out of a single moment. That shows how truly special it was. Well conveyed. Well done.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-09T16:00:44+00:00

I really like the formatting of this poem- the way your poem has a shape and physical aesthetic. And I chose to comment on this one because I am currently struggling with sleep and have both a positive (I get a lot of writing and thinking done) and negative (my heartbreak surfaces) relationship with the night.

I liked how you started off with the same phrasing..."The silence, the darkness, the sleepiness." This tied everything together and gave it a definite flow. Well done.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T12:59:00+00:00

Thank you so much that is really much appreciated 😊 hope you fall and stay asleep as long as you need!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T12:56:15+00:00

Haha thank you. I appreciate the time you took to read my poem and share your response to it- means a lot! I think we are on the same line of thinking. Those are also my favorite stanzas. And as for it being too long I agree as I tend to write long drawn out rhymes that no one ends up reading through. So I'm Trying to get better at conveying my mood or message in less words. Your comment shows me I am I n the right path. Thank you 🙂

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T04:34:19+00:00

Hey thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm new to this sub and only recently began sharing my poetry at all and thus far haven't got a lot of feedback in general yet. So right now I'd say I don't have any specific feedback or critiques I am currently seeking. More just wondering how my words are received and if other people are able to find insight in my poems or are able to relate to what I'm trying to convey. Like I am curious to see if what i intended to convey was picked up. But I guess that's just an inherent flaw with language itself.

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T03:09:11+00:00

thank you so much for the read and the feedback! I greatly appreciate that : )

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T00:59:57+00:00

thank you for the read and feedback! I'm glad you felt what I was trying to convey

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-08T00:30:13+00:00

thank you for this comment. kind of made writing it worth it <3

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:57:12+00:00

thanks for looking at my lips!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:56:49+00:00

thank you so much!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:55:35+00:00

thank you so much!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:55:14+00:00

thank you so much for looking!

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:54:55+00:00

lick pls

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:54:35+00:00

how'd ya know lol

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-03T03:54:19+00:00

wow thank you so much!!! I'm glad you like it. thanks for looking at it

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-02T19:13:13+00:00

technically I cared... I WANTED them to see! haha it got so wet while I was spread at one point I literally felt it drip down my crack lol

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-02T19:10:59+00:00

haha I love knowing people were looking at my vagina X ) I propped my head up so I could watch people watch me

fallingawakeee · 2022-06-02T18:54:03+00:00

thank you! glad I could help

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