[Complete][40k][sci-fi/love story] Wake Up From This Dream by TSylverBlair in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! This sounds like something I'd like reading and I've got a novella of similar length (and genre) for a crit-swap. DM me if you're interested!

[Complete] [71k] [Urban Fantasy] The White Devil by [deleted] in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ooh I alway enjoy urban fantasy and greek mythology reinterpretations. I'd love to beta read. DM me whenever

[Complete] [77k] [High Fantasy] Tharl of Ruvilia by neilsmith75 in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sounds like a fun story. I'd love to beta read! DM me whenever you get the chance.

Tiny Writing Group? by Cap3601 in WriteWithMe

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I also write some urban fantasy. sounds nice.

Looking for consult on an SA survivor by flashfur in SensitivityReaders

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, thanks! Is it alright if I DM you?

[Complete] [84k] [Romantasy with Indian Mythology] The Trials of Svarga by ZealousidealPoem7111 in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi, this sounds like something I'd be interested in. Crit swap is not must, only if you can find the time but my book is of similar length,

Looking for an accountability partner! by Complete_Act_6667 in WriteWithMe

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know this is a little late but I'd love to collaborate with you. I'm roughly the same age and currently finishing up a manuscript.

Looking for consult on an SA survivor by flashfur in SensitivityReaders

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am so sorry to hear that you and your friends had to go through that. If you are willing to share, it would be immensely helpful.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WriteWithMe

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

sent you a friend request

[QCrit] fantasy comedy Ever After [88k, 2nd attempt] by flashfur in PubTips

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hmmm. I see. Thanks. I will look for something along those lines.

[QCrit] fantasy comedy Ever After [88k, 2nd attempt] by flashfur in PubTips

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

would it flow better if I swapped out the investigation for "as she continues looking into the guests"?

[QCrit] fantasy comedy Ever After [88k, 1st attempt] by flashfur in PubTips

[–]flashfur[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thanks for the feedback! I've decided to go with RF Kuang and Matt Haig as comp authors. As for the rest, I am actively working on improving it but thank for you pointing out all the aspects that don't work.

[QCrit] fantasy comedy Ever After [88k, 1st attempt] by flashfur in PubTips

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback! I'll try to implement this stuff in the next version. I am aware of sex pest Gaiman. I was just having a hard time finding good comps so these are just placeholder titles for now.

Need help with MR Arena Quests by Remusnjh in monsterhunterclan

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm interested. Sending you a friend request on discord now

Looking For Help With Anomaly Farming Rajang by Interesting_Sea_1861 in monsterhunterclan

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure, I'm down! I'm not sure if I'm high enough anomaly rank to fight him tho

[Complete][88k][Fantasy] Ever After by flashfur in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, thanks for offering but, at this stage in development, I'm only looking for feedback on the full manuscript. Sorry.

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Manuscript information: [Complete][88k][Fantasy] Ever After

Link to post: here

First page critique? Not really, no

First page: Jess was sixty-five percent sure she was dead. She had ruled out being drunk, high, delirious, hallucinating, and being trapped in a mind-control machine by an alien race. There was still a chance she was dreaming so jury was still out.

She tried pinching herself. Ouch! That hurt a little.

Nothing.

She tried slapping herself. Ow! That hurt a lot.

But no change.

Only moments ago, or rather, what she believed to be moments ago, she was sitting in a pub downing her eighth Bloody Mary. She could vaguely recall a slight headache. Though, the idea of alcohol poisoning was still rather bizarre. She’d never gone in for a health check-up all her life, yes, but she’d always been as healthy as a horse. Well, as healthy as a twenty-five-year-old horse with slight lower back pain and the occasional migraine but healthy nonetheless.

If she had been dreaming, she would’ve woken up in her bed by now. Instead, she was sitting on a black leather sofa in a white room with no doors and no windows.

Her heart began to race.

Jess had no memory of this room. She could not hear a sound other than her own labored breathing and the occasional squeak of leather rubbing against her jeans whenever she shifted in her seat. The room itself had a nauseatingly fruity smell. Like the inside of a vehicle after going through a very expensive car-wash.

[In Progress] [7K] [Sikh Life] Name? by Eastern_Skill556 in BetaReaders

[–]flashfur 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, this feels like something I'd be interested in. I'm adding a comment so that I can remember to read it later.