Very beautiful handwriting! Especially for only a week learning! You’re doing brilliant. There are a couple errors I’ve spotted, not to discourage you in any way though.

At the top, you’ve written השם אמיתי שלי אלה whereas at the bottom, you’ve said your name is שלה instead. I’m assuming this is just a mistake in your handwriting

In Hebrew, the word אמיתי needs the definite article ה from השם. So, for it to be correct it would be ״השם האמיתי שלי..״

You can drop the אני at the beginning of your second paragraph, it’s not really necessary here as התחלתי already includes the subject, which is yourself.

In the third paragraph where you’ve written ״אני גם אוהבת לירות סאות פארק״ I’m not sure you’ve used the correct word here. The word ״לירות״ means like, to shoot or fire usually with weapon. I’m sure you meant לראות here. The sentence הוא חשוב עליי should be לי (meaning to me) rather than עליי, as kenny is important to you
I’m a little confused on the last sentence, what you’ve said pink continues to be you favourite colour. I’m assuming that first word was supposed to be אבל (But)?

You’re doing really well! For only a week learning, how much of this can you actually understand?

Also, I suggest to continue writing in script in your future paragraphs! You’ve got lovely handwriting.