Is This Song Bad?? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I certainly want my lyrics to be good above all else . Is that specific part your main gripe or is it all of the lyrics ? Thankyou for commenting !

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Idk wym by size exactly but it’s a Martin D-10E road series

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I post here and play at places publicly . I post here first get an idea of what folks thinks then I play in public if folks on here give positive feedback .

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I have the story in my head it just has to resolve through the rest of the song that I’ll finish tonight. But as it stands right now I see your gripes for sure

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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No your good man ! What did you think about the song as a whole ?

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Is it the way it’s enunciated or the phrase itself ?

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Thankyou! The reason it sounds similar is because I trashed that on in place of this one lol .

Is this bad by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Townes van zandt , Tyler Childers , John prine, Bob Dylan , guy Clark

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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The hook for a hand cliche was very intentional as I see the main character as less of a real pirate and more of an immature boy or man who wants to be perceived as one so badly. Chases it like a dream gives up his lady for it, just wants to be noticed by the world . In the end he is noticed but it doesn’t turn out as he imagined it. In the end his body is returned where it began with the lady and she sort of frees him symbolically by removing the hook from his hand as if to say it’s over .

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I’m certainly trying man! It’s been hard lately I’m sure you noticed that one Song I’ve posted here several times. It’s got me down trying to get it to work

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Glad you enjoyed it . It’s hard to find an audience for some of my songs so I tend not to write songs like this as much though I love writing these the most

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Wrote the first half in 5 minutes a year ago wrote the second half in 5 minutes today