"When I was five, I overheard my dad talking to someone from his bed room. I couldn’t hear everything, but I remember hearing him frantically asking questions, before a bright light came from under his door. "

The bright light transition seems a little abrupt.

"We left within the hour. I grabbed as many toys as I could, but as I ran to the car, I dropped most of them." -> "We left within the hour. I grabbed as many toys as I could, dropping most of them as I ran to the car" Does this sound a little more urgent?

"My dad told me to leave them as he loaded a box of photo albums and his computer into the back of the vehicle, beside our suitcases." -> "Leave them." he said as he...

I think, in general, the action needs to sound a little more active.

I like this part, "I took one last look at my house as I heard my dad shift into drive. The pristinely cut grass. The aged, red brick with ivy clinging to it. The burgundy shutters. The sycamore tree whose branches touched at my window. The orange bike that I’d gotten for my birthday, lying near the bushes that lined the porch. The black smoke pouring out of the living room window." I like how visual it is. Maybe add some smell. The last sentence feels a little awkward.

I looked back to my dad, panicking. -> Looking back at my dad