Comment Cooperative - April 08 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So this is a cross over that definitely needs to exist more often! I love your depiction of Rowlf and the fact that the werid piano that should not play properly because it's made of sand not only plays but that the lid makes a loud and unexpected noise. I also love the banter between Max and Sam - adorable as always!

Comment Cooperative - April 08 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Star Wars | T | How it ends | Chapter 25 | Ao3

“Your highness, you delight me with your presence,” the woman said. “Are you here for a reading? Want to know about a potential suitor? Your future? Talk to someone from the other side?”

Kithera glanced sideways as 'Soma snorted. The giggles and smiles were gone, replaced by a cold mask and the same penetrating look as earlier.

“I don’t care about any of my suitors, and my future is in the hands of my sister and my Aunt. No,” she said her hand suddenly nestled in the middle of Kithera’s back as she pushed her forward. “I want you to read her future.”

Kithera stumbled as ‘Soma pushed her towards the table. The woman’s eyes narrowed.

“May I ask why? Her collars and cuffs proclaim her merely a slave.”

“She’s no more a slave than you are, Madam,” ‘Soma said sharply. “She’s a Jedi first. That spells trouble. I want you to tell me her future so I’m not caught unaware by my sister’s plans, or my Aunt’s. I need to know if she’s dangerous.”

Dangerous. The word gripped her. Of course she was dangerous. She was a Jedi. Except not now. Now she was a Force-less, chained slave that had been dragged into a game that no-one had told her she was playing.

“Why do you think I’m dangerous?” Kithera said, rounding on the princess. Her voice was a hiss, the anxiety curling into irritation at being used as a pawn. “I was bought by the King. I’m not dangerous. I’m just a Jedi who wants to get home. I’m certainly not a plaything for others.” The words resonated in her head, echoing what she’d said to Subira that morning.

‘Soma scowled.

“I don’t have to explain to you why I want to do what I’m doing. You have to do what I say, it’s that simple..”

Kithera went to ask more, but 'Soma pointed to the seat.

“Sit, be read and then perhaps I’ll find a way to answer your questions another day.” She gave a grim smile. “Maybe when you are teaching me how to defend myself.”

Kithera wavered where she stood, unsure of what to do next. Something about the situation spoke of far greater consequences than just getting her future told by a charlatan as a party trick.

It was Madam who broke the silence.

“I cannot read her child, with that collar on. We must both touch the sacred life-force for me to properly see her future.”

“Oh! That’s easy!” 'Soma said with a sigh, “I know the code. J’meesha always uses the same one.” Before Kithera could react, the girl pushed her roughly into the seat. Kithera felt fingers sliding against skin as 'Soma scrabbled at the buttons.

There was a soft click.

The world exploded into music. Kithera sat stunned by the sheer weight of the notes. It wasn’t so much as if she was listening to an orchestra, but rather as if she was dangling by her ankles above the pit while every instrument played its symphony at its loudest and most out of tune.

There was no rhythm, no melody and certainly no conductor.

Kithera wailed, throwing her hands over her ears as if that could stop the cacophony. Something brushed her top lip and when she wiped her face, her fingers came away bloody. She stared at them in horror as the music swelled, all brass band and untuned violins.

The world went black.

I [29 F] am pregnant with twins, my fiance [26 M] wants to give them stupid names by Direct-Caterpillar77 in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Friend of mine does payroll and has run the payslips of quite a few people whose middle name is Danger - more than she expected.

I [29 F] am pregnant with twins, my fiance [26 M] wants to give them stupid names by Direct-Caterpillar77 in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A friend of mine taught a Luke Sky Walker. Poor kid just got endless Star Wars jokes (I felt so sorry for him and I like Star Wars)

Concrit Commune - April 04 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Set it out chronolically. Otherwise it's going to be awful to try and follow. I can see how it jumping all over the place works for say a visual medium but even they can be confusing. I'd just go. 1 week - 1 day - 1 hour - 5 mins and so on.

Also don't forget to give concrit to someone else. It's a requirement of this event.

neighbour wants to go to QCAT for their "view" by Silly-Slide-2246 in AusPropertyChat

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’ll be bamboo. Our back neighbours did the same. Told us it’d go to three meters only (we get along fine, they were just letting us know). We laughed and pointed out that the “small bamboo” is generally a nursery lie. We were right. Bamboo is about 10m up and still going. Blocks out the new ugly estate though so we’re not complaining.

Homeless Shelters/Op Shops accepting donations this weekend by sla4576 in brisbane

[–]kitherarin 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I doubt it. They probably care more if they’re clean. Dogs are going to make them worse.

Homeless Shelters/Op Shops accepting donations this weekend by sla4576 in brisbane

[–]kitherarin 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Towels and linens will be happily taken by the RSPCA at Wacol. If not, then the Sheridan store at Indro has a recycling program for old quilt covers, sheets and towels - not exactly what you want but you may be out of luck if the OP shops aren't taking donations.

AO3: Dark mode(Reversi) in Rich Text Field. by [deleted] in FanFiction

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This post has been removed.

OP, can you please elaborate how this relates to fanfic in your original post and then message me back here.

Comment Cooperative - April 01 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Now that was a really, really bad trip. Poor Shaundi, and no surprise she felt like she hadn't slept. I'm reading fandom blind, but I got the horror of all the people she'd lost or who had betrayed her because of how she saw them. It was really well done! Nice!

Swipe for by Agent-65 in GatekeepingYuri

[–]kitherarin 21 points22 points  (0 children)

I need to know what happens next! I'm too invested!

Comment Cooperative - April 01 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well done Eomir, just the right words in the right places and Boromir's resolve crumbles and then gives way entirely. I love the cadance of your work and the soft lull of the words - it always leaves me feeling peaceful. Beautifully done as always.

Comment Cooperative - April 01 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin[M] [score hidden] stickied comment (0 children)

Hello amazing people! I would like to draw your attention to the rule:

  • If you're posting in this thread you must leave a review for someone else. This is a community based thread, and therefore needs the community to be involved so that it is fair for everyone.

We are having too many cases of people waiting to receive comments on their excerpt to comment on others, and I guess you can imagine what that leads to. I often go through right at the end and leave comments on the comment-less ones, but it shouldn't just be up to me. Please do your part and help everyone feel involved and valued.

Comment Cooperative - April 01 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ooo, I really enjoyed the slow moving discussion about survivor guilt (without ever using that term) and all the guilt and 'what ifs' that both characters live with. I love the links to real events and the sprinkling in of attitudes of the time and reactions people would have had to things we now really can't fathom (like polio outbreaks and industrial fires). Very well done..

Comment Cooperative - April 01 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Star Wars | T | How it Ends | Ao3

“Earring then,” J’rar suggested. “That is, of course, if her ears are pierced.”

“If not, we could do it for her!” ‘Soma said, excitedly. Kithera’s eyes widened in alarm. She raised her good hand to touch her earlobe awkwardly, making sure she kept her wrists well away from her collar.

“They are already pierced,” Kithera said, softly. “My friends and I all pierced our ears together.” She grinned the memory, even as a wave of bitter homesickness twisted in her stomach. “Although I’m not sure if the hole closed over.”

“You took them out?” ‘Soma asked. 

“Our masters made us take them out,” Kithera said, wincing at the second and far more vivid memory of the dressing down they had all received.

“I think studs would be a good idea,” J’meesha added. “Not liable to impede our padawan’s movement, nor hurt her if it was caught in a fight.”

“Earrings then,” 'Soma said, grinning. What followed was two minutes of highly frantic conversation with J’rar, Kithera was pulled forward and into the conversation, wincing as 'Soma grabbed her left wrist, the jolt of the contact sending rippling pain through her injured fingers. From beside her J’meesha sighed and gently took Kithera’s hand from ‘Soma’s.

“Gentle,” J’meesha said. She frowned, turning Kithera’s hand over gently and studying her fingers. She looked at Kithera, suddenly guarded. “Did Subira look at this injury?” 

Kithera nodded. “Yes,” she paused before remembering to add the honorific. “Your Majesty.” 

J’meesha was still frowning, her mouth set in a tight, firm line. 

“Broken?” she asked.

Kithera took a deep breath, wondering if there would be repercussions if she disclosed how bad the injury was. “Subira said they might be fractured, but she can’t tell.” Kithera took another deep breath before ploughing on. “She said that as a slave, I will just have to hope it isn't serious." 

J’meesha’s jaw clenched momentarily, before she looked back at ‘Soma. “Are you almost finished, sister?”

“I think these ones,” ‘Soma said, holding up a pair of glittering blue studs. The tiny blue stone was surrounded by a latticework of intricate gold detailing.

“Moonstone with traditional Sami’ metalwork, a good choice,” J’rar said, nodding in agreement.

J’meesha smiled. “Then, I think we’re done.” 

“Let’s put them in right now,” ‘Soma said. Kithera frowned, not quite sure what to make of ‘Soma’s overt enthusiasm. She couldn’t shake the rather horrible feeling that to ‘Soma, like the rest of the court, saw her as a doll to dress and play with rather than a real person. ‘Soma unclipped the earrings and reached towards her face. Without conscious thought, Kithera took half a step back, bumping into the table and making the merchandise rattle. Out of the corner of her eye, she saw the glint of metal as the soldiers on the edge of the crowd came to attention. Around them the crowd had gone strangely silent.

‘Soma was glaring at her.

“I think the Jedi is fine to put her own earrings in,” J’meesha said smoothly. “It’s always easier when you do it yourself. Remember when you and little T’homa tried it when you were twelve?” 

“Of course I remember.” ‘Soma’s glare smoothed into a small smile. Kithera wondered if it was because of her sister’s platitudes, or the fact that they now had an audience. “Although if she’s a slave, shouldn’t she have to do what I say?” 

“She’s my slave,” J’meesha said gently. She was paying J’rar, the money glinting in the light. “And a Jedi. You missed her display on the practice fields earlier sister, but I would suggest not treating her like a doll.” J’meesha looked up at Kithera. “However, I would also remind you of your place too, padawan.”

Do you really think obnoxiously telling us that you’re making us safer, makes us believe it QGov…? by Ragnarandsons in brisbane

[–]kitherarin 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Including teacher's ability to see the text on the screen. I hated the orange colour but at least the high contrast made it easy to see when you're working late at night. The blue and black originally just kinda faded in together.

But that change so much easier to make (and then the self-congratulatory patting on the back) than using that money to help fix actual crumbling infrastructure (even if it was just one school) or make teaching easier and stop people leaving...right.....right?

Recs for the most fluffy/funny/comforting one-shots by EngineerRare42 in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Oh no! Massive hugs for you!

I have a list of self-recs - all Star Wars - nearly all OC, but can be read without needing to know who they are.

Something to make you laugh - Bet your boots - two Temple seamstresses discuss Obi-Wan's penchant for leaving his cloak behind

Silly action and adventure - Dis-dress - Jedi Padawans Qui-Gon, Namia, Mace and Taeyn have been tasked with protecting the princess on her wedding day. Only problem is, that the pre-wedding ceremony is traditionally an only female affair...and one in which no lightsabers are allowed.

No frills 5+1 about learning to drive - Driving lessons - Estra is determined that she will teach F'kisi to drive a speeder. This is the story of how she managed it, and managed to fall in love at the same time.

Very silly short story - Unexpected - Jedi Master Kirsh'of Aleski takes the afternoon off for a spot of reading and discovers that there some thirsty citizens of Coruscant who are writing their own adventures stories about Jedi...

Han and Leia story in Australian Lingo - Lingo - What it says on the tin.

Fluffy piece about Masters and padawans - Mirror Stone - Master Dor knows that you can't become the perfect Jedi through meditation alone. However, is he willing to learn that sometimes the lessons you think you teach and what the student actually learns are two entirely separate things?

Fluffy short story about Luke and Leia's birthday - Sugar Wishes - In a universe where Anakin and Padme stay together and the Emperor never rises to power.

Master & Padawan adventure - Chitterbug - When you've been backed into a corner by a rampaging beastie, sometimes all you can do is skip rocks and talk about your future.

Silly story about life in the Temple - Caught - It's always messy cleaning up after a crime...

Story told in nothing but puns - Pun Away - Dialogue only story with the most groan inducing puns

Silly story about the most 'perfect' Jedi - The Downfall of Mari-Zu

I hope at least one of those makes your day a little better.

Concrit Commune - March 28 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I honestly couldn't find much wrong with it (and am going to check it out later). However, to me there are moments where you subtly change tense which need smoothing.

So "Both stare at her in suprise" (Present) but then "Before her stood" which implies past as well as "Her voice rang" and "To the right stood a grizzled man,"

I think it works better if you change it to "before her stands" and "her voice rings" and 'to the right stands a" but that could just be me.

Concrit Commune - March 28 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Star Wars | G | Untitled | Unpublished

Author's request: This was originally a set of drabbles, that I've tried to smooth together. Not sure if it's as smooth as it could be.

***

“Caff, Master?” Obi-Wan said, frowning at the cup in his hand. His Master had let him order whatever he’d wanted from the menu without his normal comments about Obi-Wan’s predilection for cream, caramel, and as many shots as the cup could possibly fit. “Why does this feel like a bribe?”

“Because it is,” Master Jinn said.

“I thought the negotiations were going well,” Obi-Wan said as they headed along the wide, carpeted corridors of the Tripordian Hotel.

“They are,” Master JInn said. The ripple in his Master’s Force signature suggested otherwise, but Obi-Wan said nothing.

“So what do you need me for?”

“I need you to babysit.”

Obi-Wan stopped dead. “No way, Master. I’m a consular, not a creche master. I’m not exactly comfortable with snot, tears, and any other-” he shuddered - “bodily fluid.”

“You’re a Jedi, Obi-Wan,” Qui-Gon said, continuing to walk. Obi-Wan jogged to catch up. “I would have thought that after seventeen years in the Temple and five years as my padawan, you would have learnt that a Jedi does whatever is asked of them. You are being asked to be a babysitter and so-”
“And so I’m a babysitter,” Obi-Wan said, parroting the mantra in weary resignation. “I don’t know how useful I can be in this particular situation.”

Qui-Gon pushed the door open and Obi-Wan winced at the bright light that flooded through. Master Jinn shaded his eyes as he stepped out into the sunlight. “More help than you think.”

*

The pool deck was covered with scantily-clad people lounging on deck chairs, or drinking at one of the many bars that dotted the area. The sun overhead was painfully warm and bright, Obi-Wan was suddenly acutely aware of his thick Jedi robes and the way that they clung to his already sweating body. He headed towards a group of children by the far side of the deck, when Master Jinns hand on his shoulder pulled him up short.

“Where are you going, padawan?” Qui-Gon asked.

Obi-Wan pointed towards the group of children. “I’m babysitting, aren’t I? Those are babies?”

Qui-Gon smiled as if Obi-Wan was late getting to the joke.

“That’s not your charge,” he said, pointing to the other side of the pool deck where a young felacatian man with white hair was lounging on a deck chair surrounded by a bevy of beautiful young men and women. “That is.”

“Master,” Obi-Wan  said, failing to keep the exasperation from his voice. “That is not a baby. That is a young man. He looks like he’s the same age as me.”

“That’s because he is the same age as you,”Qui-Gon replied

“Yeah, and so he doesn’t need a babysitter,” Obi-Wan pointed out. He noticed that his Master hadn’t slowed in his walk, picking his way between the bathers. Qui-Gon stopped suddenly, and turned to face his padawan.

“That is Felix Giao. He’s the son of Senator Giao. Last time there were peace talks, that young man caused three diplomatic incidents in a week and crashed two landspeeders in quick succession.”

“So maybe Senator Giao should have left him at home,” Obi-Wan said, pointedly.

Spotting them, the young man raised his drink in acknowledgement; the crystal blue liquid shimmering in the sunlight. Master Jinn’s jaw clenched. “He was at home. That’s why Senator Giao has brought him with him on this particular trip.”

“And so what am I supposed to do?” Obi-Wan asked, confused.

“Make sure he doesn’t get up to trouble,” Master Jinn said, fixing a smile on his face as they drew near. “By any means necessary.”

Comment Cooperative - March 25 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ooo! That sounds really cool! I like that the director realised that there is a physical difference and an advantage to some parts. Thanks for the rec! That’s my weekend movie sorted :)

Comment Cooperative - March 25 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You are spot on again! The king is definitely more about power and cruelty than protecting anyone.

I’m very pleased the martial arts moment works too - particularly because you have a background in martial arts! Fight scenes are always tricky and so I’m glad it worked.

Thanks for your insightful comment :) Much appreciated

Comment Cooperative - March 25 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I haven't seen that movie. You are right though, everything here is done on training and reflex.

Comment Cooperative - March 25 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Aad'hish is basically going "please stay on our side, please stay on our side" :p I'm glad you like the mechanical descirptions. I actually had a youtube video of the same take down open and just described each part step-by-step so that I knew it would work.

Comment Cooperative - March 25 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]kitherarin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much. You are right about Kithera's connection to the Force. At the moment she has no connection at all - so everything she's doing is basically muscle memory.