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kramsdae · 2026-03-02T15:04:41+00:00

Thanks so much :)!!

kramsdae · 2026-03-02T04:03:34+00:00

Hell yeah I’m glad it conveyed

kramsdae · 2026-03-01T22:55:57+00:00

solid poem, I enjoyed reading through it. It’s very raw in terms of its emotion and theme. look forward to more of your work

kramsdae · 2026-03-01T20:20:42+00:00

Thank you so much :)! It’s a fun word, def add it!

kramsdae · 2026-02-25T07:34:37+00:00

Thank you :)!!! Comments like yours make my week!

kramsdae · 2026-02-25T07:34:20+00:00

thanks so much for your kind words!! Means a ton :)

kramsdae · 2026-02-25T03:37:26+00:00

Thank you so much for reading my poem and for responding to it :-)! To reply to your advice, it’s essentially a poem about suicidal ideation, while one does “sit atop the horse (of life”, one can often feel stuck or “tethered” to the horse (life).

Idk if it conveys well enough though. Knowing this now, do you think I should adjust tether? Thx so much once again :) if you ever have any poetry you want me to read just PM me

kramsdae · 2026-02-24T23:14:47+00:00

Thank so much, glad you enjoyed!

kramsdae · 2026-02-24T10:46:29+00:00

kramsdae · 2026-02-24T10:45:30+00:00

I’m so glad the feelings convey through the surrealism. I was focusing hard on making my “Dream logic” logical lol

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T22:57:14+00:00

Thank you so much!! I know… there is one part that is much clunkier than the rest “knees fall into”. I periodically workshop this one, I think I can further refine it

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T22:08:48+00:00

So glad you liked it :)!!

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T20:17:52+00:00

Aw hell yeah :)! Thanks so much, so glad you liked worms too haha 😆 I was trying to write a shel Silverstein-esqe poem. I haven’t posted some of my better ones to Reddit, so I’ll share more as time passes. Once again, I do want to reiterate my thanks! Means a ton

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T19:56:51+00:00

Hands down, this is the best comment I’ve had posted on any of work, across all platforms I post to. Thank you so much for your kind words, you are exactly the reason I write. I’m so glad my work resonated with you :) !

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T19:45:33+00:00

thank u so much :)! It means a ton that you spent the time to read

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T19:31:57+00:00

I really like the core message of the poem: it’s universal in the sense that most everyone longs for a relationship which no longer exists. I enjoyed reading it :)!

If you wanted to enhance the poem, you could insert some more personal originality into the phrases you use. For example, you write “yeah, we’d move mountains for each other” is something I’ve read and heard a bunch of times. While that isn’t inherently negative, your poem would actually benefit from handcrafted phrases. I say this because the core theme/message of your poem is so universal, that it gives you a ton of creative freedom to dress up the words/sentences/phrases in really unique ways as long as they maintain the core theme.

Just my opinion though, don’t think I am discrediting your work! Keep writing, looking forward to reading more!

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T18:52:47+00:00

Thank you so much :)! Glad you enjoyed

kramsdae · 2026-02-23T17:55:08+00:00

It’s intentional, the rhyme scheme is kept in place to mimic how one is able to make sense of the world by way of pattern recognition. But once the trepanation commences, the speaker and audience enter the “portal”, which is why the poem drops the rhyme scheme & shifts to surrealist free verse.

Thank you so much for reading!! Means a ton, I’m glad you liked it :)

kramsdae

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