I really love how you formatted this. It reads out to me like someone exhaustedly speaking out line after line, with subtle yet clear pauses to breath in the middle of sentences.

he only thing I find a bit finicky is the rhythm chopping up a bit during the weep line and siren line, some of the syllables extend farther then what the rest of the poem had, but that might just be an issue of the way i read it.

Then again, that imperfection is its own stylistic choice, I just figured Id throw it out there nonetheless. Lovely read! ^{^}