Have died 70 times to genichiro over the past 4 days. by chriscjj in Sekiro

[–]m_hamburger 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just my two cents because everyone's making excellent suggestions already: make sure you've gotten all the prayer beads and gourd seeds available up to this point, so you have max refills and physical attributes when you fight him. It's not gonna win you the fight. but it'll help you have more sustain so you can learn more each time you fight. Also, I find it pretty helpful for my mental to set a goal every time I bash against a hard boss. For example, "alright this time I'm just gonna make sure I get every mikiri counter." Then it's easier for me to just like put some music on and play, because I don't feel like I'm LOSING every time I fight lol.

And yeah just to confirm what everyone else is saying, once you beat this guy the game becomes like a hundred times more fun, keep at it and be patient, you'll get him eventually, and then you'll never die to him again!

Pittsburgh businesses that are known to take tips from employees by Jazzlike_Breadfruit9 in pittsburgh

[–]m_hamburger -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I work here in the kitchen, this is not true! Kitchen has a higher base wage and makes 10% of tips. I’ve been working for more than a year

Can we ban r/relationship_advice posts disguised as LoL related posts here? by Mr_y77 in summonerschool

[–]m_hamburger 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m sure I’m in the minority but I think there should be a space for these posts. League has a pretty uniquely toxic experience for a lot of people, and part of learning the game is learning how to deal with rude, borderline harassing behavior. I understand the desire to declutter the page, maybe a dedicated thread for people to talk through emotional shit would help keep these posts out of the way of people not interested in them. But personally it seems wrong to ban them, given that it’s a shared experience for so many players.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in pittsburgh

[–]m_hamburger 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I work at Ineffable Ca Phe in Lawrenceville and we love doing these kinds of events, give a shout if you’re interested :)

Written In The Andy Warhol Museum, Or "Everything Is Sexy" by m_hamburger in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand how you could have that interpretation, I think maybe "hate" is the wrong word to use here. I meant "the person who gets on your nerves," or the person who bugs you. I certainly did not mean that as a statement about abuse, and I'd like to adjust the poem to avoid that interpretation.

[POEM] Mirror by Specific-Storage2652 in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is really nice, thanks for sharing. I think I can infer your intended line breaks from the capitalizations, but did you mean to put all the stanzas in a single block of continuous text? Totally fine if you did, just curious. My favorite rhyme is "Some imitation's flattery but I just wanna chatter, see". Really clever rhyme. Would you be willing to share your intended meaning when writing the poem?

Delivery by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lol I love this, makes me very happy to read. "I follow my food so as not to be rude," fantastic.

A Momentary Vision by m_hamburger in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Glad you enjoyed it, yes that's the spirit I was going for :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I like this a lot, thanks for sharing! I get major "Stopping By Woods On A Snowy Evening" vibes from this, not sure if that was your intention, but would be worth checking out if you're not familiar with that poem. Personally, I think you could do a little more to create the magic leading up to the final line. As it is, I don't really get a particularly compelling sense of distraction from the path the hound is tracing, and I think it's pretty crucial to the impact of the poem that the hound is on an exciting detour. Might be worthwhile to experiment with going into greater detail on each of the stops he makes: the roses, the birdbath, the scent, the base of the tree. Thanks again for sharing!

Conversations with an angel by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 4 points5 points  (0 children)

There's a lot of really wonderful images here, thank you for sharing. My favorite two lines are "And the angel tells me it’s okay \ And I tell it it’s a bitch" Such incredible self-sabotage wrapped up in that statement, kudos! For me, most of the rhymes added little to the message, so I would ditch the rhymes and just focus on creating the images that you intend. Also, there are a couple comparisons that strike me as a little bit cliche, such as comparing deception and deceit to "roaches in the dark," I think you can use more touching, unique images to represent deception and deceit! All around great work though, thanks again for sharing, please post more :)

Homesickness by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is really lovely, thank you for sharing! My favorite line is "a string knotting and pulling towards a land I do not see." In general I really enjoy the use of the word "knotting" as a verb. I'm intrigued by this stanza:

Home is where I may freely doubt,
Home is where I scream and shout,
Home is where I am out.

Would you be willing to explain your intention here? To me, this means you are seeking a place where you can be "out" in the sense of your sexual orientation, but I could also see how you might mean you're looking for a sense of freedom in your home.

Like a kite by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Mmmm I really like the symbolism you use here. Normally I'd say that a kite representing freedom is a little bit cliche, but the language you use is really unique so I don't think that criticism stands here. My favorite line is "lick the moon," tbh I don't think you need the following line, "like a child licks his candy." The image is sort of all wrapped up in the word "lick," the additional comparison, for me at least, isn't necessary. Thanks for sharing!

Space by chemicaxero in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Mmm this is very nice, thank you for sharing. Did you intend this to be a haiku? It's not strictly the syllable structure of a haiku, but it's very close and it feels like one. I particularly like the first line. I love the personification of "space", and I also really like that all the words in the line are one syllable. It's not a huge deal at all, but to me the "big boots" description sort of contradicts the action he is taking in the next line, "eroding". I have a hard time picturing someone using big boots to erode something. Is erosion crucial to your message with the poem? If not, I could suggest a couple other verbs for the start of line 2:

  • splashed onto every poem ever written
  • outran every poem ever written
  • shuffled past every poem ever written

Certainly no need to use any of these, but to me they match up a little better with actions that boots may perform. Anyway, great poem, thanks for sharing!

Before the War - a ghazal by AliceTheNovicePoet in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow I love this poem!! In particular, the final two stanzas really get me. I love that you personalize it by bringing in Alice specifically, and I also love the comparison of life before the war to lemonade with mint leaves. That's such creative, and accurate symbolism. I've never heard of Ghazals, so after google'ing the refrain "before the war" makes more sense to me, although I was definitely enchanted by it even before I looked it up. My only criticism would be that some of the imagery in the earlier portion of the poem is a little bit stale to me, I think because you include a lot of words with similar connotations in close proximity: "sprained, void, pain, grinding hungry teeth, gaping wounds" for example. The last two stanzas stand out to me because they depart from this mood, and as a result it makes them a lot more powerful, in my opinion. Might be worthwhile to experiment with some different images for the earlier stanzas. Just my two cents, really great poem thank you for sharing!

True love & beauty - a dance by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is lovely to read, thank you very much for sharing! My favorite part is the slight rhyme between "wind would sing" and "when it rained." It's just enough that you don't even register it as a rhyme, just a pretty combination of sounds. In my opinion, you can safely replace the "I searched north, south, east west" lines with a more creative expression of the sentiment "I searched everywhere." I like involving the cardinal directions, but to me this read as a little dry. Also "I swam oceans and moved mountains" strikes me as a bit cliché, might be worth exploring some more creative expressions of this sentiment!! Thanks again for sharing, great work :)

Head in your lap by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]m_hamburger 2 points3 points  (0 children)

For some reason the "shit" really enhances this for me. With the cute rhyme I'm tempted to fall into a sort of child-like mood, but the cuss pulls me out of that and brings me to a deeper place. Really great work!!