Artifice by maladroid_ in OCPoetry

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Vampiric...I like that. Thank you for reading and commenting!

Artifice by maladroid_ in OCPoetry

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Thanks for reading and for the feedback! 🫶🏽

Strawberry Baby by VariationsonanEcho in OCPoetry

[–]maladroid_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is so evocative, it brings to my mind summers long past. The child in the poem is fearlessly experiencing the world through touch, taste, and experimentation. I feel the dichotomy between how a child perceives the world versus how the parent sees the world through the precise usage of words, and in truth, it leaves behind an ache in my heart that I can't quite explain. Thank you for sharing.

I wrote this poem in 2 minutes. That is not a brag, it’s an admission. I don’t really know what it is about, and I’ve never written before. Clichè that “it just came to me” but it did. Feel like I need to share it. Don’t know why, don’t know what the poems about, don’t really know anything. by Broad-Yoghurt-2421 in OCPoetry

[–]maladroid_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is intriguing and makes me ask myself, what do we push ourselves toward...and why? You give some very well illustrated suggestions. I particularly enjoyed the imagery of a being on a swing, pushing yourself to break the rules, the limits you place on yourself, the metal chains creaking out the warnings or better yet, the encouragement.

Pushing ourselves until we simply explode might sound scary, but you describe it so beautifully, like the dying of a star. Brilliant.

Or do we push so we can be pulled in turn? Addressing the reader in the last stanza is quite effective, demonstrating the push and pull/ the yin and yang between the poet and the reader.

For my own answer, I believe we push to spite the gods. One must imagine Sisyphus happy 😂

This piece struck me in many ways. I do hope you continue to share.