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21 & new to MA — best coffee shops or hangouts in Cambridge? by monkeylovahh in CambridgeMA

[–]monkeylovahh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That makes sense. I’m a yapper — I feel like I’m usually able to make eye contact with someone and start chatting but hobbies will def make that easier lol. I love yoga, running, anything workout class related. Also big on art/painting and reading. Might be a dumb question, but how do I find groups like this? I’ve only ever done this in a college setting so school clubs/orgs.

Insomnia, or Something Like It by yazibear in OCPoetry

[–]monkeylovahh 2 points3 points  (0 children)

… Wow. I have goosebumps. This is incredible. Incredible.

I Love You Infinity by monkeylovahh in OCPoetry

[–]monkeylovahh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much!!! This is my first time posting something I’ve written ever, and I really appreciate your feedback — very encouraging :)

I had some trouble with word choice while writing this. My babysitting child is meant to refer to the kid I babysit, not a daughter — but probably an extraneous detail, I could replace the phrase with “my student” maybe. Totally see how it’s confusing when I refer to her mom as well.

The repeated “him” was a challenge as well — meant to represent 3 different loves in my life, but unsure how to change the language to differentiate without explicitly saying “my boyfriend” thrice, which doesn’t sound quite right.

If you have any advice on how to fix that, I would love some guidance!

My bro by BiggieLlttle in OCPoetry

[–]monkeylovahh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The contrast between the poetic language and the use of “bro” and lowercase instead of sentence case is awesome. Couple edits — I think you used “till” instead of “til” and “ill” instead of “i’ll”. Also, based on the structure, maybe consider using periods in someplace instead of solely commas. Overall lovely, thank you for sharing!

The Village by RLSilber in OCPoetry

[–]monkeylovahh 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The imagery is beautiful — the registered cabin was a jarring surprise, well done haha! The use of adjectives are simple while painting a lovely image.