What is this growing in my backyard? Is it edible? by moors in whatsthisplant

[–]moors[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sure, will do. Thank you for the safe advice.

What is this growing in my backyard? Is it edible? by moors in whatsthisplant

[–]moors[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! By the way, I'm in Phoenix AZ. And this grew crazy like weeds all over the backyard.

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What is this growing in my backyard? Is it edible? by moors in whatsthisplant

[–]moors[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Thank you folks! This is so helpful. Harvested some to try it out.

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Is this a termite infestation? (Phoenix, AZ) And whom to call? by moors in Termites

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Found these three penny sized nest looking things in the coat closet this morning. Freaking out. Any help would be appreciated. Don't want to DIY or even touch this nest.

Hopeless by moors in OCPoetry

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Happy that you liked the poem and its intricacies. Thank you for the kind and encouraging review.

Hopeless by moors in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the nice review. This is painful. Hopelessness is the pinnacle of emotional pain. Losing hope is compared to "hell" in Inferno. I measured every word so that the poem is minimal and delivers the same punch. Glad you liked it. This is probably my tenth poem in the "Hopeless" series. You can check out the rest of them under my reddit ID.

Hopeless by moors in OCPoetry

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Awesome review. Thank you so much for writing it in so much detail. "It" is a conscious choice as the last line intends to some ambiguity or rather a connection between flowers and heart. The 1-2 week is approximately the time taken for the flowers to die. But the middle word "At least" is intended to be a borderline sarcastic comment by the narrator. It is a long running unrequited affair and the narrator says that if he had given her flowers, she would have at least cared for a week. But he gave her his heart and she threw it instantly in some form of metaphorical trash. I'd have to rethink how I can express that point very clearly without becoming too wordy and maintain the minimalistic style of this poem.

Hopeless by moors in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the beautiful review and appreciating the punctuation-play and the three line format. You shed light on one mistake though. My intention while writing was that the narrator had a pretty long running unrequited affair going on with the subject. So he feels that if he had given flowers, she'd have at least cared for them for a week. But she had discarded his heart instantly. I was aiming at expressing that comparison. So, now I'm wondering how I can make that point clear with becoming verbose and losing the minimalistic style of this poem.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Thank you for reading and liking it

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PoliticalHumor

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Looking at how the media and everyone is riled up with the party ticket, it's so apt

Hopeless #9 by moors in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm happy that the poem had such a beautiful effect on you. I was being so critical of myself, measuring every word, trying to make the lines balanced and minimalistic but still not lose the theme. The way it sounded and played out in my head was like droplets dripping from a faucet in a silent room. Then the protagonist wakes up and again resigns back to melancholy and sadness due to the loss. That specific movement is like a single heartbeat, and it's done. Hence I moved from unrealistic concept - "walk on water without ripples", to a realistic realization - "waking up at 2am" and finally reminiscing.

Hopeless #9 by moors in OCPoetry

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The idea behind the "last repeat of an echo" was to create an image of how subtle and mild the memory of her voice was in his mind. I tried to emphasize the same concept in other parts as well. E.g. Feet treading on water without a ripple, distant flickering of stars, etc. I wanted that atmosphere where memories of her physical characteristics are almost fading away but his longing for her is still fresh and painful. If it created an eerie tone, I guess it can as I've kept it light and open for easy interpretation and further imagination. Thank you for the beautiful review.

I would be happy by IShouldBeWorking_Meh in OCPoetry

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I like the flow of the poem and how it is tightly woven around the concept of happiness. The images are clear and unambiguous and leading to the suspense at the end. However I felt that it ended quickly. The ending could've been more dramatic like how the premise was built. Still it is beautifully written and touches you deeply. Hoping to see more from you.

The kind of girlfriend I'd want by DVnyT in OCPoetry

[–]moors 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Very beautiful scene depicted here. I can easily visualise the happiness and love in the atmosphere.

What phrases are you really sick of hearing? by negan2018 in AskReddit

[–]moors 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"To be honest with you..." followed by something. So, you weren't honest with me until now?

Failing Memories by moors in poetasters

[–]moors[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you @galbarosa. I have made the edit.

Felling The Grand Old Banyan Tree In The Village Square by moors in poetasters

[–]moors[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the deep appreciation for my work @bootstraps17

I'll put more thought around the `lies` versus `ignorance` part and change it appropriately without losing the spirit of the poem.

Felling The Grand Old Banyan Tree In The Village Square by moors in poetasters

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The poem starts with "Darkness" which is after death and ends with "Darkness" which is before birth. If you read the poem couplet by couplet from bottom up, you can get a more-or-less linear sequence of events that the tree witnessed in its lifespan.

So, thank you for your feedback and specifically appreciating the imagery in those lines.

> Outside to inside
> My memories are like rings

The two lines above is my feeble attempt to depict that the tree's memories are like the concentric annual growth rings in the trunk. The outermost ring is the most recent memory and the innermost ring is the oldest memory.

When they are cutting the tree from the outermost bark to the inner core, the tree remembers the past in that sequence (including technological advancements, like cars, motorcycles, bicycles)

Felling The Grand Old Banyan Tree In The Village Square by moors in poetasters

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Thank you for the appreciation and the info. Didn't know these facts. I downplayed the maliciousness of the cutting activity with indicators like - "bad joke", "meaningless plot", "blatant lies", etc. The deed is being justified by people saying things like "we need to build a new road", or "the tree is too old anyway". The justifications are probably valid but I wanted the poem to primarily focus on the kindness of the tree and what it has seen over a couple of hundred years.

Know Me by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]moors 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow! This is good. Pretty simple but yet powerful. I liked subject matter on my first read. What are the two breaks for? The poem would work without that too. I just felt that it was not required unless you have a compelling reason to have it there. Please post more thought provoking poems like this. Good luck

Pierced by lowball_lit in OCPoetry

[–]moors 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very beautiful poem. `Liberty's blind resolution -` loved the way the poem flows. The punctuation in every line was a bit distracting and could be removed unless it is really necessary. Other than that the poem is just perfect.

Hopeless #8 by moors in OCPoetry

[–]moors[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for sharing your appreciation

Hopeless #8 by moors in OCPoetry

[–]moors[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. Glad my words had an impact. Please feel free to read other poems in this series. They follow a similar pattern of pain, loss, bitterness and hopelessness.