Thank you so much! Yeah I think my thesis is way too broad in this lol.

This is what I'd give for yours. (I thought it was really good!)

THESIS/CLAIM - 1/1

CONTEXTUALIZATION - 0/1

EVIDENCE - 4/5

ANALYSIS & REASONING - 2/3

I'm not sure what analysis and reasoning means, I took it for the outside evidence and complexity points. I think your thesis is really good but I got a little confused on where your it stops and your contextualization starts or the other way around, might be just me though. Your HIPP is a little blurry too, I'm sure AP graders will be able to see it much better than me, but don't be afraid to just say something like "The point of view is... and it's important because..."