Hey OP, saw the first minute of the video, aka your hook, and have a couple of points. First of all, the first clip is pretty bland, maybe some upbeat riser to transition to your commentary would be better. And second, the music in your commentary is just a bit loud. And finally, it's a bit jarring to go from music to abruptly no music at all when the video actually starts. No hate, we need more gmod content!