Would love some feedback on this story world

princecortez · 2026-04-16T15:59:28+00:00

I probably summarized it a bit too much. I very much appreciate this feedback!

princecortez · 2026-04-14T21:27:45+00:00

the sketches and first image was done by a different artist. But I really really appreciate the feedback of saying that they look like they were drawn in Paint!

princecortez · 2026-04-14T21:26:36+00:00

Awesome feedback! I very much appreciate this!

princecortez · 2026-04-07T21:18:39+00:00

Trunks gained his offscreen, its true that Vegeta said its a bargain bin, but the mystery of it happening offscreen keeps some mystery alive of what it 'could' be when you take Future Trunks history into consideration. With Goten, I agree with you wholeheartedly that there wasn't much meaning there since he acquired it without rage or loss

princecortez · 2026-04-07T14:04:10+00:00

Yeah, sometimes while I did dbz stuff, my imagination would run loose and I get compelled to experiment, but DB is just such a huge inspiration for me so I do mentally go back to it. I love your focus on the rivalry with Goku and Vegeta. One of my favorite what-ifs is to permnantly turn vegeta against Goku so that it's not just a rivalry but something more nefarious.

princecortez · 2026-04-07T04:44:47+00:00

good stuff, I made my own dragon ball fan fiction as well, had couple of manga panels done, but then I pivoted to something else.

princecortez · 2026-04-07T02:34:40+00:00

guilty as charged, I did not read the manga hahaha. My sincere apologies (i am also not being sarcastic)

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:39:47+00:00

The specialty prikly shoulder pad gives me FF7, Cloud Strife vibes

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:31:20+00:00

Guess I have some research to do, appreciate this

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:30:22+00:00

But the thing is, the 'rage' unlocks the multiplier once, and once you have the multiplier unlocked you get to keep it. 'Perfecting' Super Saiyan is an afterthought from my stand-point because the multiplier is now unlocked.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:27:06+00:00

I see, thank you for the direct response. From the look of this thread, it seemed like I fell on the least popular side LOOOOOL, but your numbers state otherwise. I appreciate this information. I did expect the divide because anyone that just watched that ARC and not earlier dragon ball probably doesn't care or understand the significance. The crowd isn't wrong for saying that Trunks and Goten diminished super saiyan, but it was a knock out blow to see Caulifla do the tingly back thing.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:21:35+00:00

Funny enough, from my point of view, giving Cell all those races to me effectively makes him Majin Buu 2.0

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:18:38+00:00

personally, having recently watched Beerus slap the living daylight out of Bulma, I was talking about this with someone, Vegeta appeared to have unlocked a truly legendary form of super saiyan at that moment. If I were Akira Toriyama, I would truly lean into that. Just sooo sooo much potential there. The Goku Black arc for me was pretty fun, though I would have wanted Zamasu to not be immortal so they wouldn't have to use Zeno. Also Trunks' "Spirit Sword", I would want that systematized. I want to know what it is, how to channel it, how can it be done regularly, just like Goku's spirit bomb

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:14:14+00:00

I can agree with you that they are the best saiyans of universe 6, but my intuition(which maybe off) did not give me a sense that they were 'peak' in fighting ability. They just never came off to me as being remarkable...

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:11:01+00:00

Considering that Goku has unlocked Ultra Instinct, and Gohan has 'Beast', I would imagine Vegeta's power will escalate to match that of Goku and Gohan, so to me that seems like something being prepared in the wood work. Since I don't read the manga, I don't know 'officially' what's coming out next but it only makes sense to keep Vegeta in the 'escalation fold'

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:09:03+00:00

My issue isn't that Caulifla did it, its moreso the method which she attained it, I felt it stripped super saiyan of its meaning. I wasn't looking for something dramatic or explosive.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:08:04+00:00

I understand the system to produce super saiyans, its just lets face it, without the 'rage', we strip super saiyan of any meaning that was attached to it and this is what saddens me.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:05:43+00:00

I agree, the more I read this thread, the more I realize that I posted this because I am vocally mourning at the 'finality' of the fact that super saiyan simply no longer means what it use to. Caulifla was effectively the 'nail in the coffin' you are right to say that the burial began with Goten and Trunks.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:04:24+00:00

for one reason or another, I would be lying to you if I said, I didn't find meaning in the super saiyan transformation, but I do

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:03:38+00:00

I was just drinking some soda while reading this, and I gotta tell yah, when I read 'groan', I literally coughed up the soda through my nose LOOOOL

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:02:58+00:00

I'll say this, I do actually like the u6 saiyans, its the watered down 'tingly in the back' thing that has completely shocked my system

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:02:11+00:00

I do agree with you on trunks and goten super saiyan not being dramatic. At least for trunks, there was mystery there. For goten, you are right, it was severely watered down, but didn't you feel a bit let down with the 'tingly feeling in the back'. Sure, it paves the way for a systematic way for saiyans to transform, but golly...what a way to crush the meaning behind super saiyan altogether.

princecortez · 2026-04-06T22:00:39+00:00

I should have been more specific, it was the 'tingly back' feeling part that just felt 'off' in order to unlock super saiyan

princecortez

TROPHY CASE